All Comments on 'Return of a Princess Ch. 06'

You have no idea how long i have been waiting for you to write this next chapter :) Yes it wasnt any lovey dovey type of a chapter, but it was well needed.

This was a great addition, and i cant wait till i get to read the next chapters.

It was okay is being the highest rating I could give for this story. The story had no flow, it was rapid and barely coherent, I thought. You need to pace it and end your sentences where they need to be ended, not add another sentence to another. Its very exhausting trying to read and enjoy the story when you're so very aware of the mistakes.

I really like the idea of your story and your characters...and you are learning...this chapter was much improved. Writing is a learning experience, always wanting to write better, with no mistakes, as few words as possible that contain a big bang, and yes,criticism ...it goes with the territory. Not everyone will like what you write or how you write it. Just stay true to your vision and keep writing if it gives you joy. If you aren't happy with your editor, find another one...keep your paragraphs short...the readers here are lazy and want instant gratification, myself included. And don't give up, you have talent.

Loved your story please write more!

I am can't wait to know what happens.

I am having a lot of fun reading this story. Please continue!

i have no idea why you would ever listen to those people, your writing is gold, please continue this story, adn go back to the way it was before, strong, not weak

I think your writting is very good it captures the readers imagination which is purely good story telling.

Bravo! if anything your talent is wasted on those who do not appreciate it.

I'm loving this, i think its an amazing story and i dont even notice the apparent mistakes you made before hand!

Please continue soon! I can't wait much longer haha!

Well done on such an awesome story, may they continue!

Ok i dont normally read these but i am addicted please please please I beg of you to continue this story!

these who didnt like te stoires are losers and tick turds all 6 chs were exelent the best ive been reading PLESE WRITE MORE SOON

Ok, the comments that SOME people left were unnecessarily harsh, but there was also quite a bit of praise there (esp. for your storytelling). Quitting in a huff is NOT the answer, especially considering that most people LIKE your stories. (See the votes which are QUITE high!) Don't let the impolite whiners win!

I don't mean to be rude but, I hate when ppl start something and don't finish what they started! I get u got ur own life to worry about but, if u do continue this storie can u wright back? So I know i'm not wasting my time waiting for the next chapters!!! Ur a real good wrighter And this is a realy good storie so I hope u finish this storie....Thanx for taking the time to read this

Arleen

Aside from a few small gramatical errors this really is a well written and touching story. Thankyou

I wish that I knew what happened next. I love the plot and, to be honest, didn't really notice any grammatical errors. I may be biased but I know I that I could never write anything that came close. I applaud you and hope that the story turned out to your liking. I know that I will definitely try to figure out what happens next, though, I know I will get it wrong. Oh well, I still loved it. :)

I think this has potential, a vast amount of potential. Get an editor that helps you out more, an example, in one part of the story Aiden is asked if he wants to SPARE not SPAR. Piddly crapola like that will irk avid readers. The plot is wonderful, I am all for Elves and Faeries, and am ABSOLUTELY FOR a strong female lead. Sometimes your plot can be a bit predictable but I don't believe I have ever read anything that wasn't the slightest bit predictable. I cannot say I cared for Blaire and Liliandra having any such relation, only because I have sisters and we definately do not have the same taste in men...Its odd, in a romantic story such as this, for the male and female lead to fall so readily in love with one another. Usually they have bouts of fighting their total independence. It just seems very story-book hahaha sorry I know its a story but you know. Anyways, Its a good story and it made me stay up until 4:30am to finish it and you left me wanting more so I don't in any way intend this as critique more of a encouragement. Please take my advice on some of these things I say them to make you better, make you the best. You could have a wonderful future as an author. Love and Admiration~ Fae

Please continue your story. i would love to find out of Cara and Aidan finally get married, or if Cara;s grandparents find an elven lad for her to marry.

I love this story and would like to know it ends....... please don't let the people who can't see past one or two errors stop u from finishing this story.

There were hardly any mistakes here and I noticed you managed to describe the scenes in greater detail.

I think when the character speak though, adding punctuation marks does help give the words emotion. But even so I really think this is a great improvement and I can't wait for the next story!