by zolia_lily
Quirky is a great word...a wonderfully quirky story! I do love your work and read with an eagerness few inspire. As always you did not disappoint.
Peace and joy,
Shell
my god your story felt so real...
I was cringing and crying at the right places....
Good job..
*L*
for a story that's completed in one instalment, this is absolute gold..i laughed, i cried n my heart ached...AMAZING, AMAZING, AMAZING!
I cried. Very. Very. Freaking. Rare.
Kudos to you!
And... One more follower than you had before~
does this give us some insight into your procrastination. We are like junkies waiting for our z-l fix and you are cleaning out the pantry? Admittedly, if I could live with all your characters I wouldn't want to come back to this world for quids either but please don't stay away so long next time huh?
I almost cried at the stumbling, brave sweetness of their relationship. Great story.
I cried a bit, such a lovely and touching story. I have OCD too, still trying to overcome with the support of my family . Please write more in the future :)
How a little misunderstanding can lead to tremendous, oft time disastrous consequences. Glad, that they were able to come full circle. For a second there, I was afraid that Jake would be able overcome his mental illness only to have Paul suffer from a nervous breakdown himself. Although. I agree, normal is overrrated.
i agree ...very touching story..but is that the end? It ended very abruptly if so. I'd like to see it be finished
That's all? I mean, great start but where's the end?
I absolutely loved this story, but stopped reading it when the dancing scene came to a close. Why? This story felt so pure and beautiful, I was afraid a raunchy sex scene would corrupt it. I am now so glad I decided to quickly finish it. To the author, thanks for putting your art first.
What a great read about real people with misunderstandings and flaws and yet finding the best and worst in people, and not knowing when love or friendship will work out. It was a short read, and I would have loved to have seen it expanded, but you hit all the emotional notes just right.
this story was AWESOME! i cant even explain to you how good this story was. i was glad there was no hot sex scene in this story because it would have ruined the whole mood. this was the first story that actually made me so angry and sad at the same time. i would definately recommend this story! and it definately deserves the title "HOT"!
This is a beautiful and heartwrenching story very well written. I love your stories well done
THANKS FOR THIS WONDERFUL STORY ABOUT VERY LIKEABLE AND SO REALISTIC PERSONAGES
Paul was a real ass. I'm glad he wised up.
Jake has issues. I'm glad he was able to get help and begin to actually live
Please tell us more about these two and where they go with their lives
Thank you so much for a likeable and well written character living with an illness that is easy to marginalize or parody. As a 39 year old woman who's an OCD statistical rarity (female and onset in mid teens) recent "attention" to this illness has been frustrating to say the least. How many times have you heard someone glibbly announce their books or DVDs are alphabetized because, "they are SO OCD"? As a loving Aunty who cringes whenever her 14 year-old niece starts counting objects out loud, I'm pleased to see a sympathetic character who isn't overly-simplified and well developed while also drawing attention to the reality that while many of the more severe individuals on the spectrum are well above average intellectually, they are ham-strung by this illness to the point of unemployment. Thank you, thank you, thank you!
that jake was really going off the deep end. OCD is real and kudos to paul and heather for recognising it and offering their support and understanding. lovely story and redemption for both of them
But Paul didn't deserve to be forgiven! How can anyone be so mean!!?
You never know what could set someone off. Those nasty things you say, those horrible comments you leave, could destroy a fragile person.
Being kind costs you nothing. Manners matter.
This is so heartbreaking that I had to procrastinate showering just to read how this story ends. Paul is a one mean b*tch
I agree with some of the comments re Paul being a "sh.t" for being so hard on Jake after their great day together. However I wonder what made him so paranoid over what seems to me little things. ..... he sounds very insecure! ! I doubt many men would have shown the compassion or care and constant support for Jake like he did Paul turned out to be a TRUE friend even when he was hurting himself from Jake rejection. I liked the fact that trust and love finally won the day.
I really did enjoy this story, it drew you in and made you feel the emotions of Jake and Paul. I feel the way Paul reacted was ridiculous. My only issue with this story is that there was no sex. Now I have no problem with that if there's a bit of a warning, but let's be real this is Literotica and most of us come on or read a certain type of story. I wish the rating system was different so you could include if it's a fantastic story but doesn't contain sex.
From idiot, to asshole, and then rounding it out with a good dose of selfishness; that's Paul's character in a nutshell. It would be one thing if he was dumb enough to think the phone message and letter were about him, another thing if his response was to launch into verbal abuse, but add in the fact that Paul feels like Jake 'owes' him something for driving him to the doctor, and you end up with a wholly irredeemable character. Is this guy just incapable of feeling guilt or what? He keeps bitching about how Jake doesn't want to be his friend even though he 'was there for him.' The only reason he need to be there for him was because he wrecked the guy's life!
My husband is OCD [gay], and so much of this rung true. Unfortunately, his time management is atrocious because he gets caught in "loops". Certainly have been some frustrations and ups and downs.
This was sweet. Per a recent comment, Paul was a bit of a narcissist and slightly unlikable, but not so much so I didn't love the way the story played out.
Also, I'm very impressed with the grammar and spelling -- often those are lacking, and I don't recall noticing a single item that stuck out at me while reading. BRAVO!
Please conti the story have to read more it's really good great story hope you make a part 2