All Comments on 'Reyn Chronicles'

I like sci fi and you have a reasonable premise for your story. Now for the but. Poorly written, far too much use of the characters names and cartoon style sex. U K cynic.

Can't wait till the next chapter comes out!!!!!

I agree with anonymous, it is a good premise, but you are rushing the story. This chapter should have been longer. The rush to move him on is just that: rushed. Also please read your stories aloud to yourself and listen to what you have written, not what you may have meant to write.

Example: “Jade turned around in her chair to see the man she had loved for years but never told him she knew that she know had all the power but was he still out of her reach.” There’s at least two sentences there. They would have made sense separated, with some punctuation.

I only bother with this because I liked the story and would love to read it, and further chapters without the distractions.