All Comments on 'Right Up Her Alley'

Excellent work.

Some Paragraph trix on the dialogue between the Characters would have improved some of the HotTalk between the participants.

I'm a Back Door Man (listen to the Doors song)......Admittedly this was an ENTIRELY improbable encounter with Rules that both participants were down with but Damn, wouldn't this be FUN!

Keep workin' it, Grafexguy.

I love your story but this is a comment on the comment. althouh the doors version is good howlin' wolf's original version is much superior and although you can interpret the song as you wish the author's (willie dixon) intent was a cheatin' song. the wolf was going out the backdoor as the husband was comin' in the front... could it realy be a dp song.

The worst part about this story is that grafexguy can't keep his dialogue straight. Ashley will be talking, then the main character, then it'll be a new paragraph but it will still be the main character talking.

Grafexguy obviously doesn't care about his story enough to keep the personalities of his characters straight, either. One sentence the girl is an Ass Queen, the next she's enjoying a new experience. Then she's sneering. Then she's affectionate.

Jumpy and weird and completely not erotic at all.

That's what's important.

he had to "see a porno" to learn to put his tongue all the way into her pussy? Huh? This story is alternately hot and naive at the same time. Weird mix.

The sex is hot, but the writing style was a turn-off. You don't have to be allergic to the word "said". Really.

Damn, I need a neighbor like that to ass fuck me whenever I want. Very hot.

yes too right id love a nieboure like that as well it was a very nice story wow what a woman not many like that around

One of the best anal I have ever read!!!

Hot and very erotic!!! I loved it,wish I had a handyman like that!!!!!