All Comments on 'Rim Fire'

Reads easily and the sex scenes are very descriptive. Editing seems fine, too. Keep it up! (heh). 5*

That was intense. Well written too. Ready for the next chapter.

You hit multiple sweet spots for me!

A clear five for a nice frame, some humor, and some very hot and well told sex.

But I'm writing because this is the only Lit story I can remember that both uses and spells "throes" correctly. There should be a prize.

Really loved it

Very well written and descriptive. I enjoyed it very much and I'm looking forward to reading more of your work.

That was a great read. Very descriptive. Made me feel like I was Rick rollin balls deep in that sweet young ass. Although I probably came even harder than he did. Lol!

lol Just curious if he wins the match. I assume he does

What a fantastic story! Very well written, and enjoyable. One of the best stories I've read in a long time! I hope you do additional stories to these two.

Great story

The sex scenes were hot and dirty. Gina is a great character—fantasy material but close enough to real to believe it. She just loves good sex. You did a great job. Thanks!

Hot story about ass play. I wonder how long before he gets to rim her in return.

Absolutely exciting erotic story. What a girl is Gina....ha ha

OMG I can almost picture her perfect little arse. Tight smooth cheeks with the beautiful rose in between.

Fabulous writing.

Exceptionally well written. Great pacing. Great setup. The sex was fantastic. Excellent story!

Funny. Punny. Romantic. Dirty. Sexy. Ass. Fuck.

If you write a sequel, and you probably shouldn’t, I would love to see Gina peg his ass! I would love dialog about a three-way with her brother, ultimately rejected. And I would love to see a proposal. I’m a filthy-minded Romantic.

I LOVED this story, well written, sexy, horny and everything a erotic story should be. The story line is great, please continue it. Maybe he could play with the minx in public? You have her sounding real and behaving like a total little slut that would game for a few orgasms in restaurants, parks, or other public places.

Aww this was sweet I can see them together for a long time. Oh man loved all the anal too.

EVERYTHING about this story was great. Please make a sequel, even if it takes you a year to make one.

I love everything! You have a way of really making sex both fun and tender; as it should be.

I WOULD LOVE him getting pegged for the first time. Staring from prostate massage as men seem to find that more manly than a strap-on and then BOTH people really appreciating the other's role.

I'd love more descriptions between the different feelings of orgasming and ejectulating from the man's POV! I love the description of the tingle, especially along the head's slit, but I wish you'd take the few paragraph's to describe his orgasm the way you do your female characters!

Also, I'd love a description of HOW men FEEL (and accomplish) not cumming when she does? Does the sensation ever hurt or dull the experience? How difficult is it not to cum During a rolling orgasm thrashing around you?

This story was incredible! So hot and sexy! I loved it!

An excellent example of erotica as it's meant to be. Good story line, hot sex, romantic feelings, and something many, if not most authors on this site don't know how to do - write a proper ending. Please no part deux. Let your readers and admirers get their jollies from any number of your similarly well written offerings.

Thanks

This is a nearly perfect gem of an erotic story. Everything about it is good. From the get-go you put the reader in Rick's shoes, feeling his desire and conflict because of his friend and the irresistible hotness of Gina. The scenes are so well rendered I feel like I'm watching a movie. I'm glad to see it has done so well, both in its score and its views -- it shows that quality does rise to the top here.

Just a quick note: If you enjoyed this, there's another way to show your love between now and May. This story is a finalist in the 2019 Readers' Choice awards for the category, so head on over to the forum and cast your vote for me if you feel this is the best of the finalists :)

Well written, for sure. But the sex acts all happen too fast without -- for me, at least -- sufficient preliminaries.

For example, when she rims him, why not some building up to it? Why no enjoyment of her entire body before her tongue goes to work? Why not teasing him with her breasts, asking him how he liked them? Asking him what he'd like to do to them? Dangling them in his face and torturing him with them? Why not playing slowly and gently with his cock and balls while all the teasing is going on? Why not some preliminary kissing? Why not some preliminary touching and feeling his asshole before she gets to sticking her tongue in it?

One of the best I have read on this platform

Great story. The story line was awesome. Awesome job.

Great story! One of the best I have read on here.

What a great story. This definitely needs a chapter 2!!

Great ideas! I liked that there were less things in the way of the good stuff. Most stories take too long to get to the point.

Great story. A little too short for me as I want a longer build up with more sex to the conclusion. Kept my attention. Definitely needs another chapter!!!

However, if you had portrayed Gina as having SOME positive attributes and character rather than just a walking cum receptacle, this story would be markedly improved. Sure, an 18 year old hot, freaky girl is a lot of fun. But an 18 year old hot, freaky girl who also has her shit together? That’s the kind of thing dreams are made of!!

Hot chick and anal interest, she’s going to chew this guy up and need a forceful lover. But(t) love ❤️ the story

Hot! Good yarn...well written...sexy!

Great buildup, nice details, fantastic sex descriptions. Excellent editing, I didn't get distracted by any spelling or grammar errors, and I'm pretty 'anal' about them. Thanks.

I taught you how to spell taut

Excellent story!! 5 stars!!

I’m from the UK and get wound up a little the way you Americans have messed with our language and miss spell lots of things (😉) but what the hell, if you want to spell arse ass go ahead, over here an ass is a cross between a horse and a donkey not a gorgeous pair of cheeks that need the rosebud licking and fucking. More please.

Good buildup before the actual sex. But then there's nothing erotic about the sex, it's just BOOM. Needs step-by-step increasing in intensity starting with something less than her tongue on his asshole.

Wonderful, light and believable story line. I was immediately immersed with the characters and felt like I was right there witnessing it first-hand. Being a gun enthusiast and ass lover, I felt right at home! MORE of these, please!

Enjoyed it very much. Great story and characters

Never understood why a guy would want to keep his best friend, ir even just a friend away from a sister. Unless he knows the his friend treats wimen bad. Otherwise, if the sister's not s psycho, he's doin' a solid for his friend, plus he'll know his sister is being treated right.

There's enough a hole brother-in-laws; if they stay together, you end up with a BiL you actually like.

Unless, of course, it's really jealosy, 'cause the brother wants to be bangin' his sister, (wait, I've been reading too much Lit, that rarely happens; doesn't it?) LOL

GeoD

Loved this story. Thank you!

To GeoD, its about their own long term relationship. Nothing lasts forever and a relationship that ends may not be amicable. For someone to date a friend's sibling risks putting that friend between any spats, could even break the friendship.

Excellent. Really enjoyed it...!

Good premise.

But too rushed.

Four stars.

This deserves some kind of award. But a sequel would be even better!

A best friend and his little sister. I let that sweetheart slide because 'best friend' & 'little sister'. I've thought about what could have been for a few years now after the life I chose to settle for went south.

self editing damn good

a hint

read it backwards. Brain is a lazy shit. we just wrote that it is good if you read front to back

Now ifn yall reads it backward it makes lazy brain get off lazy ass and really look.

Had to laugh, she finally broke you------

This was a surprisingly sweet little story, well done!

Great story, I enjoyed every moment of it. 5stars.

Good premise.

But the sex is simply too automatic.

Sure wuld have liked more in the way of preliminaries/foreplay before her tongue began to work his asshole, for example.

Four stars.

You needed to take it to further during anal sex after orgasm by the girl, with vibe and dick. it felt too fast and too simple for her to get an intensive orgasm that lasted minutes

Another chapter would be great. Him returning the favor of eating her ass

I swear, this gets hotter every time I read it.

lovely!...

ok!...

read the whole thing!...

fun...

Definitely need a chapter two with a little bondage added into the mix. Gina definitely earned a good spanking. The little minx would probably get off on it.

Mmmmmm yeah I like this, nicely done it flows, it’s got good descriptions and nice characters and best of all, it’s got sex.

loved it...

Good premise.

Sex altogether too rushed.

Needed to slow down.

Three stars.

loved her..petite and horny

the end why I started wearing condoms when doing my sweetie in her butt, so she wouldn't have to get up out warm bed to sit on the throne....