by SignOfAcre
A very rushed ending that doesn't do justice to what came before.
"we are NOT going to have sex. We'll do other stuff, but not that" -- this part made me laugh really hard. In case you didn't know, the "other stuff" IS sex no matter how you look at it.
"She had obviously come to my house having no intention of fucking me" -- well, as a reader, I saw exactly THAT. Any other explanation sounds just stupid. Or funny.
This story has some childish parts and it's all about fucking. No feelings, no deep characters, no plot at all. Average reader will forget this in a few hours. Does the author really want this?
I tought it was a really good store i just wish i had a cus like this that i could fuck so keep the good stores coming.
Great first story! Also, you don't have to solve the problems at the end. Pregnant: Yes/No? Leave us hanging (and waiting) for Chapter 2!