All Comments on 'Rockhoppers Ch. 01'

Interesting world you've got here. Well written, thanks.

Random thoughts wondering if you've got scientists working on superluminal conversions. Sol's nice and all, but there's plenty more out there.

humans probably won't be getting anywhere faster than a photon does, in my stories, although there are some aliens that do.

story. Thank you for posting. I look forward to more.

the story has been posted in its entirety (ten chapters). literotica queues submissions by genre (sci-fi/fantasy in this case) so that no more than one a day gets posted to avoid an author flooding the submission list. presuming none of them get rejected for content, I believe there will be a new chapter daily for the next nine days.

Since the tags aren't very descriptive, can someone tell me what is in his story? Heterosexual romance? Lesbian gangbangs? Rape and bondage? Polygamy with a squid?

Just like to know what I'm getting into.

in early chapters, there's a fair amount of consensual heterosexual and lesbian sex. If that's what you're interested in, you can stop reading after chapter 4. Past that point, if you are easily squicked out, you really shouldn't keep reading.

... Looking forward to the following chapters.

Your attractive writing style makes reading your story a pleasure.

The character's dialogue was great. Awesome job making them feel fresh, original, and distinct.

The present tense tripped me up a little, but it's great otherwise.

Very immersive writing... whoa. Characters felt distinct, dialogue flowed naturally, and the jargon was curiously informative. For future readers, there's no erotica in this first chapter but it's well worth the read.

- Inka

. . nicely done, thanks!

Love the world you're building. I must say, however, that using the present tense is really awkward to read. I'm sure you did it out of some artistic sense, but please don't. There's a reason you don't see it outside of play and movie scripts.

Hope you stop using the present tense in your writing, otherwise I love it!

For all those reading this story ends with erotic horror.

The story setting is cool. Will see what the next chapter are like.

While the story remains hard sci-fi throughout, it becomes a sci-fi horror story around chapter 4 - and I don't mean the the fun, friendly kind usually found in Lit's "erotic horror" category.

If you're looking for that kind of story, you're in for a great read. If you're looking for a romp through space, look elsewhere.

The present tense has got to go! Outside of dialogue it's way too passive and I've been sorely tempted to ignore the potential and give up on it several times now.

An interesting concept, 5***** so far.

Mmmm, piqued my hard sci-fi loving interest. You lovely person you :) 5 sols