All Comments on 'Rocky Mountain High Pt. 01'

... do continue! Well done.

A very fun story! I hope it continues! Thank you!

Can't wait for the next one hurry please hurry I can't wait

I do partly agree with the 'cryptic' comment, in that I'm hazy as to where they are--is it Utah or Colorado? I suppose what the previous commenter meant is there's no detail as to why the tour bus was there, and except for George and Dave, we don't know why those people are there in that lodge. Of course it could have been the blizzard, but where was this tour bus going, for example? I think the person may have asked for just a few more details along those lines, since without the full context it doesn't seem clear.

I like Ryan and Diana joining, although I think it would have been better to build it up more like Jacqueline. I still say it's a 5, but I think more details would help us as readers see (for example) why we didn't know about Diana being a lingerie model or whatever and more detail about this slow-burning attraction we assume must have happened but seemed rapidly consummated without the prior detail. Fix that in the next installment and it will all be good. :)

I try not to re-write a story in my comments but judge it for what is presented. There are a few loose ends and vague situations but a little mystery adds spice to a story. My only criticism is that Ryan and Diana are portrayed to be a little more classy than merits being almost forced into an incestuous encounter. It should have been a little more romantic for them not a biological reaction to a dire situation. Maybe they'll have time to do it right in the next chapter.

So true in the fact beautiful women with sons are desired by them without trying. Often, only special circumstances can bring them together. You brought sensuality to such a beautiful story.