by For_the_writing_only
I love this story, but maybe one moan is a little too loud and dad walks in, then the fun begins...
Just because a male (the father) was added to the lineup doesn't ruin the lesbian story, in fact bring him into the story caused a little excitement for the girls. Come on now be truthful how many of you girls came close to getting caught or did. Come on whats the problem?
Ignore the anons who don't know what a mind fuck is lol.
My complaint is how short this is... More! More!
Are you a guy?
I loved the story ( Anna taking charge) but adding the dad just killed the sexy.
Agreeing with Anon. about males in the lesbian context.
I preferred the 1st chapter.
Being watched by the father while having sex with a girl? lol What kind of fantasy is that? Electra complex? C'mon...
I don't really see the point in adding males to the sexual context when writing lesbian stories. Maybe that's just a thing for men to get off.
Anyway, the language is quite good and so is your writing but... that part....