All Comments on 'Room Wanted Ch. 03'

Loved it! Hillary thing was annoying as heck, should have gotten more than 1 year. 5*

I loved this story. Romantic and very sweet ending. A story suitable for everyone (maybe even for teenage children), little sex, lots of personal relationship of all the characters, intrigue, drama and a happy ending.

Now I only need the author to finish his other story "A real man in my life" in a way similar to this story, at least with a happy ending ... Something that allows us to remember that not everyone is so wild and killer as the latest events have shown us.

5 * for you.

I apologize for my English (yet and forever), isn't my native language.

I wish this didn't end. Can we get an epilogue (I know it isn't needed)?

Stupid program here I went to click on the fifth star and it shunted sideways at the crucial second.

Giving you four.

This is a great little read.

Thank you.9

Stories are extra special and should get more than 5 stars!

Thank you ever so much

Cant understand why rob waited with his proposal until it waz inevitable

Never mind

Dani_lrlm

Idont know what lit did with my login

Great story loved it from start to finish.Thank you.

Beautiful and amazing... U must be really good yourself to right something so pure!!

I really enjoyed the story with believable characters as well as being well written

5 stars and deserved 5 stars

I truly enjoyed this story. I am adding you to my favorite authors. Thank you

Excellent! Just to clarify, I am of North East and British English are without doubt Classic in here. It is great atories!

One of my favorite serialized stories

Fabulous story. Thoroughly enjoyed it.

What a great story. Thanks for sharing it here.

God, Hillary was twisted wasn't she?!

I just wanted to say thank you for writing such a beautiful story. I will read it again and again but next time I will have a large box of tissues to hand.

Many many thanks.

While enjoying “The Big Brother Hole” I realized that I wasn’t reading your contributions, I was living them. Remarkable!

Well, I didn’t get my 30 chapters but the 3 we got were brilliant. I wanted to read all your contributions but I’m fighting to get through “The Really Complicated Family”. Not my cup-of-tea! However, I thoroughly enjoyed all the rest. Thank you; hope to see a lot more Romance stories from you.

Can't say more than that. Thank you.

I truly enjoyed your great story! Keep up the good work!

Why not let them fall in love, get married, and live happily ever after?

Convoluted?? It's a love story!

5 stars from me.

The best story and the best written that I have seen on this site. Thank you.

Honestly, after I read the first chapter, I'd been looking forward to the rest eagerly and after reading this, I just wanted to thank you for this beautifully written slice of joy. I'll be certain to suggest this story to others.

- An Avid Fan

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Just the kind of thing we expect from you. The reader can tell the amount of work you put into your stories but please keep up the good work! Another five stars.

Such a fine story writer. Wrote with care and feeling. Thank you !

Wonderful story. Great length, not too long or too short. Although I think the explanation with Hilary is a bit out of place and too details for my liking, it could be done with only a few paragraphs for a bitch! Rooting for Naomi since the first chapter. Good ending. However, I am hoping for the epilogue or spin-off. 5 stars.

Well written but not sure this is the right site for it.

Absolutely bloody marvelous!

Great characters you cared about them!

Thank you so much!

Guys it was the best I must say

I cant stop myself being forgotten by the spell that story put on me and my mind

To author I would say start writing novels and I will be on the front line to have your autograph that's I think is all I can express in words because feelings can't be expressed thay can only be shared so share this story to all your friends l

This is seriously one of the best stories I have read! I love your writing style, your characters & their stories! Please do not stop writing!

Thoroughly enjoyed these!!!!!

While I thoroughly enjoyed this series, I have to ask/wonder why/If Naomi's adopted parents will was not examined, by Pete if no-one else. As the character change and vocabulary change hints that the two elder siblings altered the will.

While I enjoyed the story, I wish there had been some more comeuppance for the older Williams siblings with the whole will altering thing. It would've been nice to know that Naomi's adoptive parents really had loved her equally. I suppose that wasn't the point you wanted to convey though.

A hearty story deserving of the highest praises. You did a fine job, mate. In each scene it was easy to visualize, which is of major importance to me. The casting of characters was excellent. Could have used a bit more editing or beta readers but the story shined through. I rate a story on how well I can "see" each scene and how the characters interact. You did an outstanding job to make everything fit and flow. You managed to get the emotions of the reader elevated and draw us into the story. A really nice read. Thank you for taking the time to write such a masterpiece.

It was so good I hated to see it end. I’ll admit I had to Google a few translations from English to American but so what? I enjoyed the story immensely and learned a little “ ‘English’ English” too. Much thanks to the author for this great story.

A really good job. Totally enjoyable

Bit of a literotica newb' but this is the best so far! Looking forward to the rest of your stories!

I just want to say, anyone who doubts your writing ability, needs to go back to school. This was one of the best written stories I have read in quite a while, the characters were engaging, deep, and as someone that lives with Aspergers, accurate. I did notice the odd typo, or misplaced word, but nothing worse than I have seen in published books. Well done.

The moment when you read a story on literotica and have confused feelings when you are done.

Doubt that Shakespeare etc, would confuse their, there, they’re in their intro apologia to USAF. Also, seems a little boastful comparing oneself to those literary giants. Distracting grammar errors notwithstanding, it’s a fun story.

Incredibly satisfying story to read!

I'd give 10 stars if I could. Your writing about people really brings them to life and you care about them, so we care about them too. Yes, there are occasional typo and grammar errors but who cares? Loved it.

This story read a lot easier than the 17 pages that it took to get the tale across. Aside from the typos everyone is talking about it was well done from a technical point of view. Plot, character development, dialog...all done well. I could easily have done without that wordy section explaining the completely unnecessary plot to discredit Naomi by Hilary and the Social Service pretenders. It was really nice to read about family life among people who need love and caring from others and indeed find it.

Just lovely

I would also have been happy if you had finished at the end of chapter 2 as the story was already moving involving and compelling. I ended up crying in this section of the story and then brought a loo roll down as it became clear I wasn't to be finished any time soon. It is a considerable talent to make such rounded characters. Also as the father of an autistic son I valued the truth and tone of the whole piece. It is a great touch to show the flowering of the relationships in the breakthrough moments of those who have to struggle to by heard as they express themselves. Thank you. I don't know if you are already published and successful as a writer in the outside world. Certainly you deserve to be. Matt matt@developmentenabling.com

A fine story, to be sure.

This and the rest of the series is well written as well as your other series. I enjoy your sense of plot and the way you mesh your characters together. There is laughter, sadness, anger, disgust and a good understanding of human nature. Your background research is excellent ant your sense of the romantic is wonderful. I hope there is a few more plots left in that fertile imagination of yours. Very well done. Thanks for the ride.

l loved the plot the way it played out Keep Writing

The only thing missing that would have made it perfect was Peter assuring Naomi that their parents had really loved her as their own as their elder siblings were hauled away by the coppers for having forged their parents' will.

Thank you for this wonderful, heart-warming story.

Having just discovered the romance section of this site I totally enjoyed your story. I’m going to have to reread it to understand all the character links but that’s more my tiredness than any failings on your part. I look forward to reading it aloud to my beloved wife of 30 years. Still my school sweetheart.

It touched many emotions: tenderness, love, fear, and was totally human. In saying human I mean as I read, I felt and explored the breath of human emotions, passion and phobias. We all fear rejection, even if our world is perfect, safe and secure. Your story touched on those traits and made me cry. Kind regards Peter of Australia

I usually don't go for such long stories but I did this time. And boy I am glad I did. Awesome story, can't get enough of it.

Being just days away from the end of treatment for cancer involving radiology and hormone therapy that stops testosterone being produced makes a sixty year old male weepy let me tell you l haven’t cried so much since a very young kid.

Please let’s have more like this it’s terrific writing.

Chris from Cornwall UK.

Perhaps not the best series I’ve read here, but certainly the most enjoyable, thanks for your hard work👍

I can't believe someone so educated could be bullied that way. I couldn't read past the first few paragraphs, I lost all respect for her, because she was such a pathetic coward.

While I understand why the previous anon was annoyed (and in some ways feel the same) it is also a fact that otherwise intelligent and educated people DO in fact respond this way to being interrogated. It's basically impossible to understand intellectually how this could happen, but even a cursory googling of false confessions will show you that it actually isn't uncommon. And this woman didn't even make a false confession to a specific crime she didn't commit, she just fell apart a bit when she thought she was going to jail. Now, if this were a TV show, or a published book, I'd be critical of the author/writer for not doing a bit more research into the psychology of it all and making it that little bit more realistic, but it's a free erotica site and the author isn't getting anything other than possibly some warm fuzzies out of it. So, why it's entirely possible the author appreciates feedback, perhaps you could in the future make yours constructive.

A great story. Very well written. I felt that the characters were quite believable. The ex-wife was a little underdeveloped but that's OK for the antagonist in this case.

I loved the whole story, especially the Paul's reasoning parts.

This is my second reading of this gorgeous story. It’s beautiful story line and inclusive morals make it perfect. I’m also pleased the family drink as much tea as mine does, properly British!!

Very good story I'm lucky to have a good and thoughtful family none of them blood, what does it matter, children are children, even now that they are all over 40! Keep writing!!!

Great story. I enjoyed it from start to finish.

I really like your photo (emblem?). It looks great in full size and still looks great shrunk down to a small circle.

This series shrieks for a movie to me made of it!!!!!!

Chapter 1: excellent story, 5 stars

Chapter 2: starting to lay the shmaltz on really thick, too gooey and a bit saccharine sweet

Chapter 3: an over-the-top hateful interrogator, we couldn’t see the rest of this chapter more clearly if you hit us over the head with a 2x4. I hope I’m wrong about that but I’m not sticking around to find out. I want to know how they come out to the family, what happens with everybody and see the happily ever after, but not that badly. I’m out.

Cute story, but kind of drawn out but well written. 5 stars

Sorry. Couldn't finish this part. Naomi, for all of her life experiences, all of her education and background knowledge, turned into a massively pathetic bubble head.

Just a shame it had to end.

Well more than 5 Stars.

Rapier

Possibly the best story that I have ever read on Literotica. Five stars but worth ten.

Ummm ... Anonymous from Dec. '21 is a bit off the mark. Naomi's semi-breakdown makes complete sense, given her history. Past psychological trauma can cause even the most level-headed of us to think irrationally. Kudos to the author for a great story.

Good story, although the “bad guys” were writ large and somewhat caricatured, that said they only appeared for a short while, not leaving any lasting impact on the plot or HEA, I suspect writing them as more calculating and realistic may have made the story a little too dark and spoilt what was an otherwise light, occasionally comedic piece.

5 ⭐️ For the series throughout, I loved it, especially the depiction of Carla, who I felt was the true star of the show, writing her as Tinkerbelle was inspired.

Many thanks for writing and posting, cheers Ppfzz.

Aside from the drama of Hilary, Annabel and Naomi's birthgiver, it is one of the best stories I've read!! Thank you

Excellent story however the punishment meted out to Hilary and Annabel was child's play! The little bastard Kyle should be institutionalized. The bitch Jen Harvey never got her comeuppance!!

Naomi really needs therapy!!

Wow! This is a very good story! I'm sorry it's over. I would love to read a few more chapters! ;)

I am reading my way down the alphabetical listing of your stories and they just keep getting better and better! I thoroughly enjoyed Naomi and her family, especially Carla. More please!!

Overall very good, touching story. Ending tied all the people together very well. Like Grandma telling off John and Ruth at the wedding and the "new, expanded" family and Paul finding her half-sisters in time. I have read 3 of your other stories and all are very good, thanks for writing them. Ignore the anon idiots with their complaints.

Into each life some turmoil will fall. Very little i this one. There were a few ........................my vocabulary is lacking...........but there were a few numb nuts and assholes in this wonderful story. Could have shortened that last part showing what all his previous family was up to as that was all covered previously when they tried to run our female MC out of town. 5 stars.

Really liked all three parts of this a lot. I was really confused at the start of part 3, thinking to myself "There is NO WAY social workers in England have that kind of power, if so then their government has gotten WAY more tyrannical than I thought". Glad to see there was a reasonable explanation for it. I look forward to reading more of this author's stories.

I would like to reply to an anon farther down the chain who was basically unsatisfied with the comeuppance that was received by the villains in this piece and to any later readers who feel the same: The best revenge against your enemies is a life well lived. The joy and love surrounding Naomi is all the punishment those bitches need, she'll be as happy as it's possible to be and living her best life while they get more miserable by the day.