by DonnaBeck
Another fabulous chapter, one wee complaint. I'm fairly certain the time difference between London and NYC is 5 hours. Maybe daylights savings time doesn't line up 100% for a few weeks and therefor it is possible to have a 4 or 6 hour time difference for very short periods of the year. However, as someone who has ridden the transatlantic romance wheel this quirk was enough to jerk me out of the flow of your wonderful tale. Can't wait for the next installment!
and also want to point out you changed tenses from "John weaseled" until "'Yes I did'". Just a minor thing to watch out for. I can't blame you though; I appreciate the speed at which each chapter is coming out, so these mistakes can happen randomly lol.
That is how I find myself after reading this chapter. John made me cringe a couple of times at the beginning but he is like a different person with Amy.
Thank you for all your nice comments and emails. I am behind at answering emails (life if busy) but I will reply soon, if you gave me an email address. Yes, this story is complete and the glitch with the site is over, so you should get a chapter every day. And thank you for the nice comments here. I took a risk showing our leading man in bed with another woman, but it wasn't frivolous. A person's body may not be where his heart and mind are, and John is a bit inexperienced at listening to the heart. But he's learning. :) DB
First we get John's brazen but affable insistence on the wardrobe consultation, which leads to him revealing his concerns and saying exactly what Amy needs someone to say. Then we get Amy and her teasing text followed by the silly cat photo.
Who could NOT think these two belong together?
Another terrific chapter!
Sorry John comes off as a pompous ass. I was hoping Kieth would step up and steal Amy's heart. I like the underdog.
After stupping the hottie, he has the nerve to ask about date atire from a one time date? And this was humored by the women? The women are not coming off too good here, but John is an ass. Girls always want the ass.... hole that is. haha
I loved the Freddy bit and understand that many people would react negatively to him
screwing his old girl friend, but they are not even to second base yet and there is no commitment.
Definitely enjoying the story so far, but noticed something mid-way into this chapter that bothered me. The paragraph starting with "John weaseled out..." switches from past to present tense for a couple of sentences, then the story returns to past tense. It's a little disconcerting to see that happen and it didn't seem intentional...
Aaaah Meeee while with Sarah? And he doesn't even like her, right?