by SapphoLust
I like the storyand would like to see more chapters. A real good start.
Very compelling stories, characters, and sex. Please keep writing
xoxo,
Di
A decent storyline but careless on the grammatical error and duplication of the story back to back. You could have benefited greatly from an editor or just someone to proofread it. Still with this being said, you have a foundation to work from, so please continue.
(Please try to correct this story. It starts from the beginning once you get to the end).