All Comments on 'Rx'

Short and sweet!

5

A cute short one.

Very good but it could be a longer story.

This Is AWESOME! Now wey can expect a longer and even more emocional story

Well done

short, sweet, excellent

Excellent for 750 words.

Great first story. Five stars.

A lot said in 750 words.

Nice but wish it was longer

Eight months? It's "cheating", not "cheated"? And the baby maybe not his? That's a lot to get past. What other choice did he have? I like the way there was no delay. He got to it, got it all out, and made his decision. Nice change from the usual slow process.

What a zinger. Great read.

Liked the story but would have preferred a bit more to it.

Excellent story to good to be so short I want more !

A follow up would be great!

Wow. Covered a lot of ground in 750 words!

Well done. D

Good story.

I don't like BTB stories. So, this ended well by just saying "We're through" and not having the husband go off the deep end.

liked it alot!! and that is saying something for this long time reader. More please

Right to the point, well done.

A very effective use of just the 750 words, you mange to tell us so much. Thank you for posting it.

Miscarriage or not, I doubt they'd operate on her without full bloodwork. This should have ended months before it did.

Excellent, but the problem with 750 word stories is that there are so many unexplored possibilities. A very good story set-up and good writing. Make it longer next time (I still gave it a 5*****)

Good idea but too much short and flat. What's the point ?

A good story. It is a wonder that he didn't notice anything earlier; and why she must have known but didn't do anything to cure the problem,. Maybe it was more than one guy and I guess it was nothing just sex to assuage an itch. Write some more.

Simple and effective. Well written. Very nice job, excited to see what you write next.

Perfect

Short and to the point but she needs to suffer a bit more if there is ever a quick follow up story.

MC asked all the right questions.

Short and direct. One of the better '750 words' out there.

Well done in 750 words. Taking no bullshit. Now the county center for disease co troll takes over the distribution of exposure and Shane as they track down and investigate everyone she had sex with.

About as good as a short one like this can get.

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4 ****

I had to give this story 5 stars, it just makes sense for the way you have written this. Short but definitely well written

It's bad enough that she cheated, but when caught, she lied about it.

Not bad. Would have liked for it to have been drawn out a bit, rather than a 750 worder.

short and to the point

I concur with the other commenters. You told a great, complete story in 750 words. Great Job!

Generally I like the 750 word format but as well as the author did here I can't shake the feeling that this needed more. A good one, though.

If I were him, her cheating cunt of a body would never be found.

3 stars for a decent start that could be expanded out to a great story with a little effort.

Hoe hoe hoe!

Got ya b***h!

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Good story @xMule.

Thanks.

That was one of the better 750 word stories submitted. One nitnoid. An embryo attaching inside the fallopian tube is an "ectopic pregnancy". These can be very serious including life-threatening if the embryo continues to grow. If that happens, surgery is needed or the fallopian tube could burst.

Full marks for the story.

Good start, wish it wasn't a 750 word one.

Wow, we need more stores like this, direct e decisive, great work.

5***** Short and to the point. Nice approach to exposing her unhealthy cheating acts.

Very well done, please do another!

great short story

Nicely done.

Short but sweet.

4 out of 5 from me.

Loved it. Well written. 5 stars easily.

Thank you for sharing.

Well written. Had everything needed for a short story.

Short and to the point. 5

Badda boom! Short and pithy. 5 big “gotcha” stars

And if she had said the baby would have been his?

This is one of the best 750 word stories I have read here. Well done!

I rarely favorite a 750 word story. This one is an exception.

One of the few stories that could be told well in 750 words.

Reed Richards, good point. That might have been worse if it was his and it perished because of her cheating. Now she can live a single barren existence while he goes, finds a better woman and has that family he wanted.

Oh, I liked that.

A nice real short story.

Well done.

Quick and concise, great story. Kick her to the curb. Thanks for writing

@sbrooks103x

It's bad enough that she cheated, but when caught, she lied about it. - It sounds like you had never heard or thought about it. Which I find unbelievable, like most of your comments.

As several comments said, "Nice, but I wish it was longer."

I've heard that comment before!

Why does it hurt when I pee?

Why does it hurt when I pee?

I don't want no doctor to stick no needle in me.

Why does it hurt when I pee?

RIP Uncle Frank. Thanks for posing this timeless question.

Good story, nice revenge.

Short and to the point.

Great story! I doubt old BTB hating bi cuck Ic69 will agree with me, but that was a pretty near perfect first story. Write on man.

Yeah, oblivious was the right word. Maybe with the second wife he might pay more attention? The cheating slut was a lying betraying monster. How is that hidden from an attentive discerning perceptive husband? Only in LW stories are husbands this deaf dumb and blind.

Lovely!

Tight, short ,and brilliant .

A lot packed in to those 750 words! 5 stars.

An excellent submission .

So short , but everything is there .

You want more . You want it to be longer even though that would ruin it .

Best story I've read on here in weeks .

DK . 5 * .

Thanks for posting .

That was entertaining but the best part is the authors bio picture.

Ugh...just like every other 750 word story....feels unfinished. The 750 word contest/concept is without a doubt the worst idea Literotica ever had.

Needs consequences and some revenge. still give it a 4

I loved it and gave it 5 stars. It was short, quick, and to the point. I don't normally like 750 word stories, but this one I do.

5 stars! Short and to the point.

Ditto with the second anon down!

Short (which often is good), but impactful and to the point. No garbage cuck shit. Nice author-induced BTB with the bitch hopefully never able to have kids again. Thank you author and easy 5 stars.

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I disagree with comments disparaging 750 form. Gettysburg Address is under 300 words. Declaration of Independence is under 1500. MLK's I have a Dream speech is under 1700 words. Short doesn't mean incomplete or bad. It depends on quality.

Brutal!

Short and to the point 5 stars from Xluckylee for a great short story

Yes, I liked this one. Powerful, impactful, precise. I like longer ones too, since there is more opportunity to buy in to the characters, but this is good.

Really well done. Hope he pretends to forgive her and takes her on a romantic trip to Mexico where he sells her to a cartel that runs whore houses in Tijuana. That would be a fitting end to this bitch.

Didn't want to know about the one time after issue, but then finds out it's been going on much longer and still doesn't want to know? Why would a writer want to create such a pathetic Main character? What motivates somebody to want to encourage all the female dogs out there to run around loose and think I'll just get away without consequences. Because you didn't explain that there are consequences to this Behavior. And you certainly didn't describe the consequences that should have been brought down heavily on the scumbag Predator out there that caused this. And yes, no matter how stupid selfish and self-absorbed the so-called wife would have to be to do this, there's still is a scumbag out there who needs serious accountability. By leaving that out, you encourage it.

No retribution, no justice.

No justice, no peace.

1, Great story!

2. Great 750 word story — hard to stick the ending on these, but you did it!

3. Great first story — please continue!

Another doozie. Quick write and publish some more!...smile

Good short story

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A Short, Sharp, SHOT!

11/10!!!!!

she's got to go

This story great but my opinion is that the story needs another chapter or at least a epilogue to wrap it up with style

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I wouldn't have even hung around for this opportunity to lie several *more* times. Cum dumpster deserves whichever of the likely multiple other partners gave that shit to her that would even pretend to want her around full time after they 'spread the love' with her the first time.

I like my stories short, like my marriages.

-A

That's how to do it in 750 words.

An ectopic pregnancy is almost always a surgical emergency when it ruptures, not simply a miscarriage.

One of the best 750-worders I've read.

Good one a definite beginning, an informative middle section that clearly explains the problem and most important of all a very brief but clear conclusion. “We’re done, thanks for nothing!” That is as conclusive as it gets.

Elementary my dear Watson.

As another poster commented, an egg implanting in the Fallopian tubes is a life threatening emergency. This would have been detected in an ultrasound and she would have been prepped for emergency surgery. There is not insignificant pain involved as the growing embryo starts stretching the Fallopian tube, sometimes accompanied by spotting.

My wife had some spotting early in her/our second pregnancy and this is the first thing the ObGyn wanted to eliminate as a possible cause.

Very clear and nice.