All Comments on 'Ryan's Surpise'

This was so fucking hot i wished it was longer. Please write more!

I thought I could read past them but just too many. Also at one point you had abby fucking her brother when it was indeed brit.

There's just too many errors to enjoy the otherwise good scenario...

This was a not piece but it lost a lot of momentum do to poor editing, and longer would be nice.

Thought for it incest i would of had him fuck hes sisters ass instead.

FFS

Orgies with unprotected sex...uh...can we spell STD's up to and including aids? This is written as a stroke story with tons of sex and an ounce of actual story. Ok if that is what you're looking for.

Add parts and maybe start a relationship with on or both please. Good so far. F the haters and grammar nazis.

Your story is HOT, almost VOLCANIC, but it needs to be longer & less hurried! Delft doesn't appreciate a 1st timer author, but you have true promise. Keep up the good ideas, add some lead in, sensuality, & you will have better scores. Liked the big cock & deep-throat parts, a little anal would take it over the top for many readers.

1st time, Well Done!

kjohns2001 needs to get a life!!! THIS IS FICTION!!! If your miniscule mind can't grasp

FICTION, then you don;t need to be on FICTION WEB SITES!!!!!!!!!!!!!

A pre-pubescent masterpiece. A true child's eye view of erotica. Stunningly stupid and totally removed from any semblance of possibility. Please kill yourself before you subject the public to any more of this drivel.

Well written. lots of action.

not into whore stories

doesn't the fact that they were going through guys left and right before him gross him out at all? They would have to get tested in the real world lol.