All Comments on 'Sad Son Pt. 06'

Fell at the last hurdle. You should pull this and write a more believable ending. Up until this part it was one of the best stories I've read. So thanks for the first five Parts!

I loved the whole story. Clad he ended up with a good woman and at least he ended up with some of the sisters. But the ending seemed rushed.

Not even a single chapter for us pee fans? :(

That is what I expect from a BMS story.

Yes the epilogue did feel a bit rushed, but if it had not been there, I would imagine dozens of comments demanding one more chapter to know what happens to everyone. It put a nice bow on the end of what turned out to be a great story. It had some ups and downs, and wasn't as polished as I would expect, but was still a great story. Thanks for Sharing and I can't wait to read what you come up with next!

Wow, what a top notch story. I am thinking hall of fame eligible. Thank you for your amazing talent. I look forward to reading more of your work.

Unreal lovely fun. Thanks for adding the epilog.

No story is perfect but this comes very, very close. All of your stories show much talent and passion. Thanks for sharing your thoughts and talents.

5* (worth about 20)

Tc

Excellent. Thank you l can't wait for your next story 👍👍👍

Fantastic, hated to see it end .

I liked you alternate ending better than the first, even without to much detail you tied up all the characters lives. As I was reading I was wondering how you were going to do it, oh definitely have one crazy imagination and I'm sure happy about that.

I hate to see this end it was brilliant

I want more

Bummer you had the slut Mitchell in through out the story while she basically shit on Hal but Katy you totally left out think she deserve more

Yep. That was good; real good. Thanks.

It was a good story. Adding the extra ending was a good idea.

I enjoyed the epilogue, it gave the story the closure it needed. That isn’t something that happens on here often.

The other reviews are wrong as I see it ! The ending (as I see it ) was good , he had explained all that he wanted to , the way he wanted to so he wrapped it up with his style . I would like to see more . As I have read you for several years THANKS !

txcracker

I loved the story. I really enjoyed the epilogue. It was a nice way to see how everyone ended up. Thank you and keep the stories coming.

Damn, I loved this story! Now I sorta feel empty now. It was a very good story. 5 BIG FUCKING FLASHY TWINKLING NOVA STARS!

A very good read from beginning to end, thank you so much for sharing.

GREAT

I absolutely love the story line. not too much crap, but enough sex and all to keep it interesting and moving along. Please keep writing

Excellent ending with the updates. I look forward to your next stories

4/5 I think the line "However, I have had some amazing men in me. Unless you grow four more inches, you can't hit those places" and the fact Sara needed to satisfy all the sisters while having sex with Hal left me with the feeling Hal alone could never satisfy her and nothing in the rest of the story changed that feeling.... too bad, it was set up for very romantic conclusion.

I ĺiked the whole series. -Should have done more with Kate as she believed in him as an authority figure and tried to help instill confidence in him.

i enjoyed this story. bummed that it has ended

What a horrible ending! Despite some issues I was enjoying everything until this last chapter. So he dumps his dream girl because she spreads her legs invitingly, and he can't deal with how 'slutty' she was with her ex-boyfriends? No, instead he falls for the 'retired pornstar'. That label annoyed me in earlier chapters. They were hairdressers. How can they say he was the most respectful male they ever met when he keeps bringing up the life they are trying to leave behind and kept referring to them like that to everyone? But sure this older, former pornstar isn't a slut like Michelle, she's perfect. It was was an abrupt change in the story, I felt like a missed a chapter. Finally, I kept waiting for the MC to become even somewhat likeable, but this whiny, self-righteous kid becomes worse as the story went on. There was zero character growth, he just became preachy, repeatedly, about how legitimately shitty everyone treated him. Too many repeated conversations. I really like the first few chapters, but never lived up to the promise.

thank you for the Epilogue just wish that Katy got to see Hal. But I understand how that wouldn't work with what you had done. But you have outdone yourself with the hold story and the epilogue.

I enjoyed your story a lot. Thank you!!

Loved the story not the ending seemed liked it was rushed

This chapter was disappointing. The overuse of porn star made was annoying. The whole arc about how being a porn start didn’t define her and yet that is what she was referred to most of the time. I found myself skipping the repetitive sex scenes.

Really bad ending wound up to soon still HD legs in ending author got bored or lost interest sad

A pretty decent story up onto the end. A retired porn star? That's like paying full price for a 5 year old New York City Taxi Cab. He couldn't have found a nice, low mileage girl out of all those admirers?

Oh Well. Looking forward to your next story.

This was an okay story but could have been better. The MC was weak, his balls never dropped and he cried too much, He never manned up and you simply don't become a man just by having sex. I can't see all of his sisters forgetting or ignoring him especially when he was the youngest. Women are capable of amazing things on their own so in a house full of seven sisters, no way does he fall between the cracks. Also if Gail could save Michelle in high school how could she not done the same for her brother? Hal and Michelle are in the same grade and it seems the Gail cares a great deal about him, so how could she not try? Which bring me to Michelle. You essentially bring her to the finish line and then get rid of her at the last moment for an older more worn out Michelle 2.0. Yes you can have sex with someone and it can be disappointing however that's the difference between a hook up and love. Hal had a crush on Michelle, that's not love. Hal and Michelle never did anything together, went on a date or even really know much about each other. However they skip all that and have sex with him and his sisters. Then Hal becomes worried that she's a slut, when he's getting it from all his sisters and get blown at school. who's really the bigger slut? Then magically he turns into Casanova and falls in love with a porn star that's been more worn out and used than Michelle can possibly be! The whole retired porn star aspect was the most ridiculous part of this story. Yeah some downtown clothing store just happens to have secret sweatshop of hair dressers that are all retired porn stars lol. I can't see a lot of porn stars being hairdressers out side of a porn shoot. Hal has a hard time looking people in the eyes in this whole story, but when there's former porn star(s) he's a prefect gentlemen, yeah right! I don't know if you just got lazy or it turned into your fantasy of making with a porn star but this whole story just falls apart in the last chapter. Feels like Michelle was given up on for no good reason and replaced with a older sluttier version. Given that's Hal's entire issue with Michelle, so it just doesn't make sense to end up with a porn star.

I loved the story. It was 12 hours in audio format. There were good and bad parts but I did enjoy it.

That was a good story in the matter what the haters say I hope you can do more and don't pay them guys nomindi would ask them answering this question if they can do story better than you why they don't have a story on their own up on this site as a one writer to another writer I have that same problem with one of my fan fiction and a fan stuck up for me I asked the person who was talking way too much s*** about my story to ask that very same question.

The entire series was really good. Thank you for sharing.

that was one hell of a story.

thank you

That was the most amazing and uplifting story I have read; would like to see more with a military slant. Semper Fi, Shipmate...

Garbage

Great , great story. Love it. AAAAAA++++++

Loved it

Read this four months ago and had to read it again.

I stand by what I said before. But after reading the comments I feel the need to add this...

Those that comment about how Hal was a wimp, whiney, or his balls never dropped; are morans. Being a man doesn't mean you have to be Macho, a thug, or even super 'manly', It was said multiple times he's a musician, a creative soul; those type of people (guys and girls) operate on a different level than others, and when you add to that his past and low-self esteem it is entirely believable that he would react the way he does in most circumstances. If those commenters really read the story, they should have read how Hal stood up to those that tried to Rape Kate, How Hal stood up to that guys at the Charity ball, AND how Hal stood up to Sara's Mother in the first part of the 'meeting' when we later learn how 'ruthless' she could be to those that piss her off. That's a 'true' man in my book.

I will add that my one regret that I didn't mention in my first comment but after reading the comments I only now realised is no mention of Kate in the epilogue, I would like to imagine that after that meeting with Sara's family that, Sara and Hal made contact with Kate; Maybe with a ticket and Backstage pass to a Concert in Cali where they had some fun and at least everyone got closure and remained friends and Kate found love there and is happy with them all being friends. Thanks again for Sharing!

It has been THE most intriguing story I have ever read. You my friend are the reason I enjoy reading. Please keep up your passion for writing.

Great ending...

Very well done! 5/5* all the way!!! - from Fort Worth, TX

Overall a good story, kinda disappointed that Hal wasn't able to be with all his sisters, or not giving each of them children. Andrea should have gotten pregnant by him. That was a missed opportunity.

Loved the story. I was somewhat like Hal when I was in High School. So his situation socially is not unfamiliar to me. Of course his fairy tale ending is expected as this is a fictitious story.

Good job ! Suggestion. I will assume you’ve already gotten some fees back about continuing the storyline by adding things about the children. Just a thought !

I waited until I read all of this fantastically written story. I greatly appreciated the brief synopsis of what happened with the family; all too many times we’re left wondering. I’m looking forward to seeing what is next.

This bounced around for a 4⭐️ to 3⭐️ story for me,,, I understand the sister thing but Andrea was his first choice,,, yet it read like she was pushed aside,, I understand her being a doctor and schedule,, yet all the other times she was put aside,,, yes Michael was not good to him and needed to be taken away,,, Sara is a character that was unusual,, she basically shamed him at the start of the bedroom part ,,, putting him down about his size before he did anything,,, she just laid there and was like ok ,, next ,,, and then she basically used him to get to the sisters after he was done,,, it reads that she just jumps up and dives into the sisters and does them without even thinking about Hal ,,, yet he ends up marrying her,,, and still playing with some of the sisters,,, I am glad that you did the finale of the characters,,, overall 3⭐️ story for me

I loved this story so much, it is hard to describe how I feel. I am still crying from all the emotion that reading this story filled me with. Some other writers might think there were a few mistakes, but so what. The flow of the story never changed and the ending and epilogue was just excellent.

Thank you for writing this.

It was like your other good stories. Occasionally it goes way off and never-never land as far as fantasy goes, but the basic story is pretty good.

Lots of people read erotic stories, with a tissue in their hand. Seldom is it to wipe away tears.

Incredible. Simply incredible.

Great story great job very relatable and romantic

I love the depth of personality and character that you bring to your storytelling. All up and down the scale from high school abuse to millionaires power plays. You pave the road with good sex and heart wrenching twists. Thank you so very much. You are a hero.

Absolutely A plus in my experience of reading erotica. Fantastic.

This chapter did not have the same feel as the last five. To me, it felt more like a standalone. Your main antagonist felt like a completely different character. Other than that a great series.

Excellent job!

What a GREAT ending. I think you're a VERY gifted writer, so, be sure to keep up the good work.

Completely bonkers but very enjoyable series

I have read to of your series stories. They were both excellent. I will be reading the rest of them. Great work.

WOW!

In a comment 9 months back I read this as their though, "Lots of people read erotic stories, with a tissue in their hand. Seldom is it to wipe away tears." I had to say I don't believe anyone could have said it better. This story was pure entertainment, and NOT just for the sensual and highly sexual content. I laughed, I cried, I was excited... and it left me wanting more even though it was toed up well at the end with the addition of an update for all.

Just wonderful work!!!!

CONGRATULATIONS on producing a work of art, erotic, romantic fiction that is also a serious tearjerger. Hal has become a rounded,grounded character during the series, unfortunately the same cannot be said for the other characters.

A beautifully crafted work that has been a pleasure to read I recommend this work to one and all who enjoy anything other than a continuous wham bam thank you mam style tale.

I enjoyed this story and read it from first to last chapter. Of course real life intrudes and does cause breaks lol. Vey very good story 5 ⭐ for all chapters.