All Comments on 'Salt and Pepper'

Hey, this story was a little bit short for group sex, wasn't it? Actually, it was short on the sex, too.

I dunno, maybe this is the new kind of group sex, the abbreviated version.

Anyway, your story sucked.

Yours was a good premise and hot enough for 75%. Actually some more text would have helped. For example, when Patti said, "Let's do it together," did she touch her friend to help her get off, or did hubby touch "Salt's" breasts, etc.?

A little short but to the point, more deserving then the "0" score, but then some people have no clue what it entails writing a story, any story no matter how short. Thanks for the read author. ML

I like your relaxed style and storytelling. It could have been a tad more descriptive and longer in doing so, but very good overall...keep working on your craft....