by seasparks
Well written story, it is a pity that it appears that we will never see a chapter 2.
Unless this guy is on Viagra...you're trying a bit too hard. Pun intended. The sex descriptions aren't bad, but your story needs work to be convincing. You need a little background as to why the sisters were so easily swayed into the taboo, a car accident that wasn't even their fault doesn't work.
Personaly I think the story moves along at a decent pace. I give a 9.9 out of 10
It is NEVER as much fun when the wife knows... you can write well, but it's so much better when it's a secret.
I really enjoyed this submittion, and look forward to more in the future..really looking forward to the next chapter of this story..great charaters, and a solid story line!
Excellent for a first time story. I hope to see more of your writing soon. I hope you get both of them pregnant.
A great beginning with a combination of characters that can lead this story almost anywhere!
A car buff that knows how to please his women! For Sandy to get pregnant you're going to have to stop fucking her sweet ass though,lmao! Do continue I think your well rounded threesome has a lot of other possibities.The Pantera was a nice touch bet a lot of readers don't have a clue as to what a hot car it is!
have them put on some sexy uniforms or underwear but really enjoying this. dont wait to long to write part 2!
Exciting and well-written story. Could do with some more ppolishing. Loved this writers work.
Do give it a read.
Sandy and Robin need to begin wanting to make you a daddy...both of them, as they go off the Pill without telling you.
Sizzling hot, I fast can't wait for him to get involved with Robin, but please build it up slowly and nicely like good foreplay.
Odin
That is just HOT!!!!!!!
Congrats on your first story, and it that's an indication of more to come, bring 'em on!!!!!!!
Top stuff seasparks!!!!!! ;-)