All Comments on 'Sarah and I Pt. 01'

love to read about the "next time" Sarah mentioned.

need someone to stay home and cook dinner for her? That contrived way of leaving them alone together kind of spoiled it for me. It also annoyed me that he had to do all the errands and his sister had no responsibilities. It seemed unrealistic.

Please write more, and give Jamie a slightly hairy chest -- something for Sarah to ogle, and perhaps taste? Very sexy!

Please continue I can see them falling in love. Maybe have Mom catch them making love.

I know you are from England or Australia by the 'Mum', 'wank' and the sentence wording. That's not the problem I'm having, some of the grammar is too formal, like 'whilst' instead of while, etc. While I liked the story, I think an editor could help you greatly. Other than that, nicely written.

Please continue. I would like to read about the next encounter and also as someone suggested being caught in the act by mom.