by Bettyspages
Great story. I love your imagination and your story made me start breathing heavy sitting here at the computer. xoxo
Good first story, but I think it would have worked better if it had been told from the past tense point of view. Not that the present tense made it sound like a movie or stage script (like so many others that use the present tense), I just think it would have had the same impact, or better, if it had used past tense. I also think this needs a follow-up chapter, or more. Hope your imagination continues to be fertile.
Loved your story. Read your bio. You are here to read and write. I'm here to read your hot stories - and masturbate! You must be one sexy woman. What you write tells me you must love sex. Whoever you go home to at night is very lucky. Keep it up - and while I'm reading your work, I'm doing likewise until I cum! Thank you.