All Comments on 'Sarlene's Touch Ch. 16'

all sex and no story

chapters because of your glacial pace of plot advancement.

Even smut must have plot advancement, or it just becomes repetitious. This chapter is a good example. This character, the squire, seems to have only been created so two different characters can fuck them.

Callesyn alludes to the 'group' using the squire for some function, as if it is important to the story. When the squire meets with Almandour in the last chapter, there is mention of them meeting before, but it was Lady whatever who went to the party when the squire was introduced as a character, not Almandour.

This slow pace will never get high marks, and given the scoring inflation on Lit, the mid 4's it is getting should really be considered a 2.5, not a 4.5.