All Comments on 'Satin Dress'

Good for him

Enjoyed, Thanks for your writing.

Good ending.

Well that was depressing

Unless you like wimps, DO NOT read part 2. I made that mistake, and can't like this half of the story any more.

You missed a perfect opening for solid slam. When you wrote, "It was an even colder night in bed." you should have followed that up with him saying, "I guess you're saving yourself for your boyfriend."

good on him

A bit shorter than it could've been, but that OK. Loved how the husband not only told her what would happen, but immediately took action. The unasked question: "You want this for yourself, what about me getting something for MYself?"

Not that I have any history with it, but divorce papers are generally in large manilla envelopes. How'd he get it in his pocket, unless he folded everything into a 5x7. Anyway, for the story, 5 stars. Bob

Attaboy

I liked what you wrotw, but I

Okay that didn't work out. As I was saying, I like what you wrote, but IMHO I believe you sold your story short by not expanding it.

Short and unsweetened just as I love them. 5 stars from Xluckylee

People might complain it's short but it's more realistic than 90% of lw stories. Hell, you even stretched it a bit by having him wait a few days until the inevitable. I prefer short and realistic instead of having cheated spouses waiting ages until they physically see the strange dick penetrating their wife's cunt, before they make a decision.

I agree.

With those who say proof of cheating

isn't necessary.

But most of the most popular LW stories

have three parts.

Before - drama - after.

Some call it: Shock - action - healing himself.

Even the best 750 words stories have three parts.

That's why this story gets 4 out of 5 from me.

I enjoyed it and gave it 5 stars. It's a little short, but more direct than most of that type of story on here. Plus you stretched it out some to make it slightly longer. I've seen some writes take 3 or 4 pages to do what you did. Good Job.

So Glad Just what cheating wives deserve (jaybee186)

I can see people who complain about "no healing himself" ending, but WTF, you try to write a short story, THEN you can criticize. I would dock a star from a long story for lack of a happy ending of MC, but short story doesn't deserve that. It was good, the husband wasn't a wimpy cunt like half of LW stories here (even among those that aren't outright cuck shit).

I liked it. Short and sweet and to the point. If she's already got in mind she needed to be with another, she'll do it behind his back anyway.

Good moves by the husband. Why waste any more time on the slut. Jonathan still needs payback

Reads like a news summary…

And that is your ending wtf u need a better editor or something stupid