All Comments on 'Satin Dress'

Yeah it was short but a cracker never the less.Morally right from the guys point of view in every way ,well done and nicely wrote.4⭐️

Well done. I liked it

It was really thin but OK.

Good one.

I guess the Jonathan guy "bubbled and squeaked" when the husband kneed him in his cojones!

5

This was ok either way, although it would have been hilarious if a friend saw the wife and her date out and recorded it after the divorce papers were dropped on her. It had to put a damper on their fun.

Well there are men that let their wives/girlfriends go on dates with other people, we know that happens. But the crux of the matter is what she wore and the no communication from the wife. Any right minded husband would want more answers from the wife.

The author described this as a punchy story, but it was more of a punch drunk story. If Mike Tyson punched you in the face and all you could think of were LW clichés and had to vomit them out in short order, it would look something like this.

I gave it an extra star for brevity, at least.

So what would he have done if she sent the guy away and didn't walk out the door? D

A lot of potential but not really a story. Good plot but no character development, no exploration of the couple’s problems. This is the third story in as many days that I’ve said FINISH THE DAMNED STORY!!

10 stars for a great short story. I Like it because Hubby took NO shit from his sudden slut wife. #Buster2U

Story could have used additional editing. Authors who bring up "company morals policy" show only their addiction to copying silly urban legends. And, realtor will not list a house without both husband and wife's signature on the listing agreement, and no one would buy a house without both signatures.

I like it when the agreived party, in this case the husband, takes direct action and not some convoluted revenge. 5*

Jack off material for little boys

LMAO.

So, 2 more paragraphs constituted finishing the story? Did he follow through with any of his threats? Did she follow through with the date? If so, was the promise of no sex true? This was even dryer and more lifeless than a story from Dragnet.

thats still not finishing the story! needs to have a fallout and at least a chance at reconciliation. not saying she gets one but the chance of one

Great story. They don't always need to be 10 pages long. Lot of nitpicking in the comments.

I believe a person can have a platonic friendship with a person of the opposite sex. Most folks on LW would likely disagree with that. She admitted the guy had pestered her to go out with him (obviously knowing she was married). The wife stressed she had no intention of having sex with her date, BUT she bought a slinky dress and new stockings and put a great deal of effort into to looking fine for her date, a clear signal to Johnathon she was not viewing this as just two friends out for a meal. Hubby was right to call bullshit on her lies.

I think the whole thing was senseless. Married women don’t just “go on dates” with other men, with the expectation that it will be fine. There is either a whole lot of story untold, or the lady is insane.

"Great story. They don't always need to be 10 pages long. Lot of nitpicking in the comments..."

So, suggesting that the premise is farcical and simplistic and that the story is more of an outline than a story is "nitpicking"?

lol

"they all don't have to be 10 pages..." Most shouldn't. but this is just boilerplate...

Too short, yes but concise might be a better term. Said it all. Disrespected and action taken. Hopefully he follows up and gets them fired. Jonathan gets nothing but swollen nuts and bruised ego. Now MC can go find a better woman.

Short but OK. Worth a 4*.

Too short. The ingredients, however clichéd, were all there, but no detail, no emotion, no characterisation, no action, no tension, basically no more than a synopsis of a story. Incidentally, as she was to receive half the value of the house I assume she was a joint owner? And one cannot sell a house without the consent of both parties.

Short and to the point.

Too short. Yeah, it was decent and told the story but details and nuance are what turns a decent story into a good one or a great one.

I liked it. It's very short and I think maybe there should be a sub section to Loving Wives just for stories of this particular story line, wife announces plans to go on a date and hubby says he will divorce her and does. After the hubby knocks the interloper in the nuts and the dumb wife is surprised when she gets papers served. The asshole is too. You would think that one of the assholes would think to at least were a cup. Everyone knows if you target another man's wife, you are going to get your nuts crushed or your nose broke if not both, ... don't they?

Had the bones of a good story, but then it flopped. 3*

FTDS

Had everything needed and well written. She ended the marriage and that ended the story. All the rest was paperwork.

I liked it, gave it 4 stars. 5 stars is a great story, and writing a great story this brief is insanely difficult. So, for a quickie, I thought this was written well. For those thinking more finish is needed, nope, you did just fine.

petulant, whining, 4th wall breaks get one star

Still wasn’t finished.. cliche troop.

Perfect.....only I would not have even given her the chance to stay at the beginning.

Well AverageGuy61 was correct about finishing. A reasonable, if brief, look at the consequences that stupid women don't consider or their egos fail to take into account. I didn't like the abreviated ending because one of the best parts of this type of story, the confrontations, pleadings and fallout, were left out.

Always wonder if these things actually happen in real life?!

Just to short. It could have been fleshed out a little more. Particularly towards the end.

To the point .

Perfect .

5 stars.

It would have been better without the statement that you were finishing to satisfy those who might want more said. You were correct to add more. It went from a 3 to a 4 thanks to the addendum. The tale was more complete.

Great short story He did what most of us other guys should do BRB straight away and start a new life (jaybee186)

Gee imagine people reading your story wanting to read a proper ending. Whatever were they thinking…..🤔

Average

well, I didn't Hate it...

There are almost just 2 kind of LW tales: 95% cuck tales and 5% btb tales. The 5% of the btb tales, also include the fake btb ones, with none or little payback to the betrayer. But why the very few btb tales are almost always long just 1 page while the countless cuck tales are long many pages and even in multi part ? Anyway, even though this is one classic and short btb, it deserves the full 5* just for giving a little break, among the endless flooding of the fetish cuck fantasies.

Reads like you have too many irons in the fire as an author. No new ground whatsoever explored in this regurgitation of a common LW trope. Frankly, the effort put forth here was inadequate to warrant a submission.

Still ended to quick. Needs another chapter. 2 stars

Ending was rushed heck the whole story was rushed. One star sorry.

My toddler could have shit out a better story than this.

I now know what bubble and squeak is. Thanks for adding to my culinary repertoire.

Ignore the haters and idiots like GarySmith69 who think it is OK to cheat on your spouse by going out on dates with others when you made a marriage commitment as long as you don't dress too sexy. It was short and to the point so it was a bit quick but that was OK since you set it up that way.

Short and sweet. I find stories with long irrelevant expositions about marital history to be tiresome. 5 stars.

It was good, but I can't help feeling you wasted the story's potential.

Short stories are basically a waste of everyone's time, unless you've come up with some exceptionally funny/interesting/dramatic scene. Even then, that scene would be better incorporated into a larger and more fleshed out story.

It was well written, and he didn't put up with her shit, so I still gave it a 4*.

I like the fact that he just pulled the trigger. Lies and deception prove intent.

Yeah…very common trope, but definitely the right response. ANY wife who wants to pull that shit…even after being begged to not go thru with it….has already departed the relationship. Sure…the first time maybe no sex…but she wants “excitement”, and sooner rather than later sex will be required to get that “excitement”, For a short tale about a common trope…well done.

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4 ****

always a good topic but not much here to make it good other than he divorced her. More in the beginning or middle would have helped or as is a decent part two with some flashback would be great. I mean the dialog she could have (her POV) is in itself a story worth telling.

Average. Three stars. Even the follow-up couldn't save this story.

JPB

Ha! Nice filler. Thanks.

"she'd mentioned him several times a few months ago, but she hasn't talked about him at all for a while now" - It's always a bad sign when they stop talking about the guy.

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Agree that her dressing sexy (and sexier than she did for her husband!) is at BEST a bad look. He should have called a lady friend and arranged his own date.

The story was decent until you added the "Fuck you!" afterward. If you're going to write in the Loving Wives category, you need to be more aware of the impact of (and response to) disrespect...

Even with the epilogue it's still incomplete. It's like expecting meat and potatoes and only getting breadsticks and a salad. 3*

Dialog was a bit off, not enough follow through on slut wife's reaction but I really liked the husband's full acceptance of the reality of her request to go on a date. Get out now, she's expressly said the marriage is over. A previous commenter said there are men who allow their wives to date other people. I disagree, those are not men, they are emotionally damaged, mental adolescents who've mistaken the concepts of love and commitment

Short and to the point. Can’t fix stupid entitled wives. Thanks for sharing.

Rofl I don't think a paragraph is an ending but ok it was good till the end. Cant win them all though

Far from your best. The finish needed expanded.

Was the good beginning of what could have been a great story would love to see it finnished.

No problem here that it was a short one. Nicely done.

Enjoyed! I would like to see one more short story like this from Sandra's point of view.

I liked it. 5 stars

But imo the moment she dressed up sexier for another man than she did for her husband the marriage was over. The satin dress and stockings sealed her fate.

I also liked that he didn't pussyfoot around. He did what needed to be done despite loving her.

I liked it. There are too many stories in which the husband accepts or even enjoys being a cuckold or he ends up forgiving the cheater because supposedly she is gonna change. I hate those stories and I wish there were more like this one. 5*

It was OK, for what there was.

R-E-S-P-E-C-T!!

Think the MC will find a better woman? Not likely. Look at the statistics concerning second marriages.

Thank you,

That's fine. She had a terminal case of the dumbass. John Wayne was right. You can't fix stupid.

Good read.

All the best,

Dave

Lackluster. 3*s.

Short, as you said, but satisfying. The Bear approves. 5 stars. good luck in your future life, M/C.

Correct response, no mucking around or elaborate revenge.

Oops, sorry. I forgot.

The BEAR

⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐

A story that kicks off with Adnam's Broadside catches my attention! A good, simple story, 5*.

Did AG warn you about getting flak for an abrupt beginning too? LOL. No depth or chart development, just a single scene in a larger not developed story. 3.4*

What a massively arrogant way to view your readers.

A trite, shite walk through a cliche or two. The ending was the least of this story's problems.

Every time I read one of these ‘wronged husband’ stories I think “Are there really women out there who are this stupid?” No women I’ve ever known would openly tell a spouse they were going to cheat and think that would be okay.

quick abrupt ending. I thought about it and the story couldn't have ended any better. Except the husband finding another woman to love him.

Good try but too much left off. The story deserves some meat on those bones.

Good story. Write your vision. Dont write to try and please the readers. On this site, there willalways be haters.

Click, click, click. Snapshots that show a moment. A series of shots, perhaps, that have little context to any larger picture. One can view them with detachment because they illustrate an event, but the event cannot touch the reader as it has no link to a broader story.

Taking Happily_married 87 suggestion.

good idea, in coming. It's going to be short.

Les

What a wip out on a premis that had lots of potential

Simple and to the point. Worked for me.

Scores 4/5, was just a tad too short for my liking

This just seemed rushed. More of an idea than a story and as such it's basic and already exists in hundreds of LW stories. Nothing new here.

Too short, too direct, little or no character development. Did I miss anything? Oh yea....the abrupt ending you were warned about.

Meh, Averageguy was right, yet the ending you added was still MEH. Its not cute or clever to leave stories unfinished.

Great story. She fucked around and found out. This was a real dick shriveling story for the little bi/cuck boys like Ic69.

Why do these writers make the women so stupid . No women in her right mind would do this.

I liked it with no ending, and with an ending. Great story.

Ed

It's a five-star harsh story.

Harsh but absolutely appropriate. 5*

Look on the bright side, Sandy, you can be bored getting bored by new dates until you’re past it.

The ending was fine. She showed contempt for him and her marriage. She clearly doesn't respect her husband. Somethings can't be fixed or tolerated.

Bit of a slut ray though.

I gave you 3 stars not for the short ending. But tired of the btb crap strick lovers dunb wives getting boring

Decisive, for the best tho, her character as presented was nicely on her way to straying eventually. Best to end it before kids

WOW, What a perfect short story of a cheating slut wife. Short story because the cheating wife wasn't given a lot of time to fuck around. Hubby drew a line in the sand and the wife quickly crossed over the line. The wife thought she was entitled and took her hubby for granted. She tried to take advantage of her hubby's love and quickly learned she couldn't and got the consequences. I liked the "knee to the knackers" part best. I have seen guys scream and cry totally freaked out by a groin injury and it can be completely devastating to the "smarmy" guys who deserve it the most. I have always been ready to deliver the pain to asshats that think they are better than others. We are all in the same boat with an expiration date. Some are luckier than others, but none are better than others except the Good Lord.

10 stars, even tho it was short. I loved it. While the wife bought a dress, hubby got Prepared! Buster2U