All Comments on 'Savannah Becomes a Boy Toy Ch. 01'

terrible spelling, terrible punctuation, not very erotic at all.....

Bring it to ythe next level. She should try her boy friend, but come back to you unsatisfied. Needing you to take care of needs, and go from there.

That is sad and very disturbing

nothing but a stupid rape story by a wannabe writer that doesn't have the brains to put it in the right catagory

First of all, try to write it from a girls point of view. it sounds like a guy wrote it. Second, the punctuation is horrible. you need to go back to the drawing board. and plus, this isn't right, its rape and blackmail rape at that.

Good job. It really turned me on a lot.