All Comments on 'Save Me, I'm Yours Ch. 01'

Good concept but "Jack...Jack...Jack!" That got really anoying fast and I almost stoped reading. That may be a device to your writing to develop the crazyness of the women in the story, and if this actually went somewhere in the three pages it was we might be able to see that. As it is if this is how your story continues I will not be able to finish it.

Is Elisa inspired partially by both GLaDOS (from Portal) and the Machine (from Person of Interest)? We haven't actually got much backstory on her/it to tell the truth. That conserns me. He could be carrying the being that causes the end of the human race.

I thought the obsessive nature of Amy at each phase was good . The last time Amy showed up in chapter 3 had me laughing so much I had to explain to my wife. A nice action thriller so far.