All Comments on 'Saving Bethany'

Great story

Good story. Good mechanics. And a difficult topic. Many girls who were saved by male family members when I was younger had fixated on their saviors.

Nice plot line. Logical and concise. Cults are the worst having been exposed to the BagWan in Antelope Oregon an Heavens Gate in Cardiff California. Suggest you might have incorporated a more subtle segue from his persona as caring father to the sex scene. Definitely needs a follow on chapter as the ending was way too abrupt . . . .

@ToughSailor

Thanks for the feedback. I agree, looking back at some of my earlier work I can now spot more bad habits of mine that need to be cleaned up. I may circle back around to this and do a rework as I feel I didn't properly build out a lot of elements, such as a how the father's character was being impacted and changing, as well as cult follow-ups.

Wonderful story. Love the name they chose, lol.