All Comments on 'Scarlet Ribbons'

I just wonder if he ever saw his daughter again?

A few niggles... In order to access Amazon, I'd think you'd need a device... and his phone didn't get replaced until later. The hotel could have provided a computer, but then you've got to remember your passwords, and revert to using your credit cards... something he was avoiding by paying cash for the room.

5. .but i wish u wrapped it up with the kid.. 🤷🤷👌👍👍👍👍👍💯💯💯💯👋😉😁🙋🍕🍺💰💸

The daughter was a manipulative psycho. Even at 16. Axel keeping his distance from the daughter would have made more sense if he had known more of the details about how Machiavellian the daughter was.

Liked the story and loved the ending.

Read again. Wasn't ready for it to be finished, but it was time. Very very good.

You didn't close the issues with the daughter. I don't care about the wife, but you can't treat a 16 year old child as a grownup.

@rn2711 - hate to disagree, there are consequences for betrayal, even if you are 16.

Good tale, thank you! 5 stars

somewhere east of Omaha

Carrie even at 16 at mental health issues. 5 star story. Axel got a new life with Barbara and their child. Chandler wasn't the asshole I expected. He just got caught in the web of deceit and machinations of Carrie, Jim and Julie.

I wish it would have ended with a reunion with his daughter. The mother certainly messed with her mental well-being.

Nice story, nice enough character set, nobody was that bad, it could be a real life story, if I have a comment about it the ending was just too rushed, it needed just a bit more

I gave it five stars because it was so well developed and written. However I saw the last line, while ironic, a bit lame.

JPB NOT BOB

Laptopwriter, hopefully you will continue to expand your knowledge and add more with these characters. The ending was cut off seems to me.

Good but the ending seemed flat to me. Yes, Axel would have been furious with hs wife and daughter and I can understand if he never spoke another word to his faithless wife. And his sense of betrayal and loss would be even greater in its way than the emotional trauma from his wife's calculated abandonment of him. That said, it seems unlikely that he would never have any contact with his daughter again, in part because it doesn't seem that he knew just how much his daughter engineered her mother's infidelity. It also seems unlikely that at least the daughter, who had evinced sadness and uncertainty at how she and her mother completely abandoned her father, would not have tracked the father down and tried to achieve some resolution and reconciliation with her father.

Without that, the ending seems rushed and the story incomplete. 4**** for a writer who normally gets only 5***** from me.

I wish the ending could have been a bit more involved.

Regardless, Julie and Carrie.

Carrie needs to see a mental health professional. She is CRAZY!!!

They were a bit dispicable but at least Axel didn't do the loneliness is forever unless you take your true skank back series of events.

Carrie is going to need s shit tonne of therapy

The ending was so bland.

I agree with some other comments, Carrie really needs to talk to someone about her fantasy life. Someone besides her lying conniving mother. What a selfish bitch she turned out to be.

Great story, though, LTW, thanks a lot for sharing. Five stars.

Good story with a good outcome for the MC, but could have been fleshed out a bit more, still enjoyed it.

my only problem is i thought the daughter should have a chance to reconnect with her father ?? at the very least she needs some therapy .

Not vindictive or anything. But, think the two harpies should be burned at the stake.

It was a good story, until it wasnt... It seemed like the author just lost interest and wrapped everything as fast as he could. The ending was emotionless and bland....not at all what the initial build-up promised. The wife was a robot, the daughter, a psychopath. But neither was sufficiently explored. 3* due to the unsatisfactory ending.