All Comments on 'Schoolgirl Uniform; Mandy'

With a heart as dark as coal...

but seriously, loved this naughty tale. Well written, not, excellent use of dialogue. Lots of sex after lots of build up to create anticipation. I felt like I was there watching it unfold.

Hot!! Do another please. Let's get that cherry lol

good story, very erotic and im sure she would visit again and again

good read

so hot! perhaps she should take Donny to see Mr Kole for some lessons in receiving as well as giving

Brilliantly written.

Loved this story, seriously hot, well written, I could see everything in my minds eye as I read. There HAS to be another chapter to this tale, maybe even a third.

Very hot! I love sexy older men showing naive women how to enjoy their body's sensation to the fullest. Would love to see this continued more nipple play and licking her ass. Makes me want to lube up my vibrator and reenact this seen in my head..mmm

Please write more stories!

Same old, same old, and not particularly erotic.

lay,lie confusion. misspellings, typos? anyway...,i liked it cause i LOVE to fuck women in the ass...

Wow! this is one HOT story, you captured the sensations brilliantly. I found myself touching myself as Mandy's ass was taken.

Oh Mr Kole❤️❤️❤️

Fantastic. Even though damn near illegal.

Love the scenario and descriptions. BUT, couple of recommendations to improve readability, IMO, if you don't mind:

1. Please minimise the -ing and -ly words - they kill readability and immediacy.

2. "Adding to the annoyance, he placed the main action verb second in the sentence, again." <-- This sentence construct. Lose this, win friends. Honest.

Great job all the same. Keep it up.

Improve the grammar and you've 5 stars

This needs a sequel