by coldprinter
You should give more descriptive details if the school and of the teacher and abit if his personal life to fleshing his chscther out. Also add family members to make him more human
The pacing is too slow. I didn't even make it to the second page. It seems to me a lot of words without driving the plot forward.
That was so hot. Normally I like more of a slow build up but you somehow managed to create realistic tension really quickly. Loved the descriptions during the sex scene. Can’t wait to read the next instalments