by JANAMARIE
three better than two.you just can't stop fucking trish after a year.
Your story has a great plot and premise. The only problem is that the story jumped in places. In the future, you should fill in some missing pieces like when and if he ejaculated and also add more intensity yo the suxual experience. I do feel that Trish should be next to be knocked up. Keep the stories coming!
You write as I think; In that when I am having sex or even thinking about having it, my mind races through all that I am going to do to her and all that I want her to do to me and by God, that is the way you write. You build a story far and away better than any of the other authors on this web. You make us feel we are part of the story rather than just reading it.
PLEASE keep up the great work