All Comments on 'Screwing the Boss' Wife'

Needs some minor editing. There wasn't really any build up or background information. Great concept though and I look forward to more.

I agree with the prior comment. You need an editor or a more patient approach. It is an interesting concept and should be taken further. BTW, I did not read the whole story, just enough to evaluate it. Rework and expand. I will be happy to take another look.

MUCH MORE PLEASE