by Athena_e19
I just read all three, absolutely incredible. Brother-sister love/sex makes my heart melt. Can't wait for more. :3
Hi, This is one of the best series that i have enjoyed thoroughly. The dance scene was the best. Keep going.
strange, the extensive use of the word 'would'. This seemed to detach the writer from the characters and the characters from the action. It became that the action seemed to be not really taking place, only that it 'would' take place in the future.
I must agree with the first poster (Anonymous in U.K. now SPAIN) that the "would" was kind of distracting, though I was not able to describe why as well as s/he did, but I did notice it a lot in the first two chapters and I didn't get much out of those.
But then this.
That dance scene was HOT. Whoa!
I don't know if it was because I was really horny, or because dancing is a big turn-on for me or because you just did an amazing job, but I have never been more turned on by a story in my life. I was seriously shaking.
Very good story line. The way you lead up to them finally being together and the intensity of the dance/orgy makes it more beleivable. Loved it!