All Comments on 'Seabee's Homecoming Ch 01'

Brilliant start to a hopefully even more mesmerising story. Fucking hot too. Can't wait for the next chapter.

Holy shit!!! This may be the start of the best series I have read on literorica. Some people are going to give you a raft of shit about it not being incest (yet), but screw them and write more. Thanks for the story!!

A hot story! You must continue this story line. I like the characters and their dialogue. I like the way you use words to show the love they are finding. Let them explore the feelings they have discovered and let him take care of that loser of a business partner. Even though she wants to wear his collar, their feelings go much deeper that a dom relationship. I will be looking for the next chapter. Thanks for your time and imagination.

That was some great writing. I kept wondering when you were going to solve what happened to his dad and also was he going to contact his sister as I was getting closer to the end but then I finally realized this was only part 1. I am definitely hooked.

Yeah no, fuck that. Take the astroturfing campaign to a different site, no one wants you here.

This was very well written and I really appreciate the amount of care you've put into the sex scenes and the relationship between Ree and the main character. Simply the depth of the scenes involving clit play make a welcome contrast to your average story's "he rubbed her clit, and she came" formulaic and blasé prose.

While there is some criticism to be had that this story progressed way too fucking fast, such is the nature of erotica that the necessities of real life are smoothed over in pursuit of a narrative. The relationship developments likely could have been spread over another four pages and had only positive effects on the pacing, but I can understand the author's desire to not complicate the story with needless filler.

- The Anonymole

So hot and the storyline is well thought out. Can't wait for the rest of the story.

So erotic, and nice why Reagan and dad have a meeting that would lead him to marrying such a beauty. Can't wait for more.

Quite honestly, I nearly stopped reading this story on page one. Not because it wasn’t well written, quite the contrary. The chronicle of the mother’s death was so well written it was heart-wrenching.

The sex with the step mother happened pretty quickly, and the great sub-text of the embezzlement kind of got lost in the second half.

However, the sex scenes were hot and the overall writing and composition were spot on, so I gave it 5-stars.

Well done!

Please continue the story, hope there will be ass play as well as more of the dom parts. The Sister has to come into play as well, she has to be a sub too. Please continue your story and bring it all together.

5 Stars. Keep the story going, waiting for next chapter. Thanks

GREAT STORY!!! Can't wait for the next part! Like linnear said what happened to Dad? What happens to Nichols? What about sis?

PLEASE 🙏 PLEASE 🙏 hurry with part 2! 🤗😜

Definitely hooked, I really liked how it went from just ho hum "gonna fuck my step-mom" to developing an actual story line with the sub/Dom fantasy. Hoping you incorporate the sister somehow in the future.

Looking for Ch. 02!

More please asap.

Great story keep up the good work and just to let you know I was a Seabee myself

Retired Sailor who worked with many Seabee's over the years myself. Please continue this. The drama of your backstory is ALMOST as interesting as the sex!

More please

Outstanding story, Keep writing!!! You've got the makings of a really good series.

As a retired Seabee this story caught my eye. I look forward to seeing the continuation of the story.

We Build, We Fight!!!

Keep up the good work! I like where this is going.

Need part 2 ASAP!

Chapter 2 please!!

great stuff hope you decide on doing a chapter 2

great start please continue.

I really enjoyed that story, please tell me there is more to come?

more chapters will be really appreciated.

It has been a while since you posted chapter 1. I just hope everything is OK and that you haven't been affected by the Covid situation. Hopefully we will hear from you soon.

I really enjoyed that story, please tell me there is more to come.

Love it!!!!

5/5

Interesting story, lots of lines to pursue. If you are going to use a particular setting as window dressing, do a little research, nearly stopped reading after the three glaring errors in the opening. Overall, well written and really want to see how this plays out and which thread you tug on.