All Comments on 'Seasons with Samantha: Summer'

Still contains spelling and grammatical errors.

Its a good story, but yeah tons of grammatical errors and you keep switching from 3rd person to first person, often in the same sentence. If this is a video blog, then keep it first person.

as the first two people said, there are too many grammatical errors and the changing from third person to first person in the same paragraph is just plain wrong.

I also realize, that while you are writing as told from someone living in England or Scotland, the usage of the language is more like an American than an Englishman.

I would like to see a second chapter, but it needs to be proof read and edited before being posted.

Thanks for the story.

great story, looking forward to more chapters. I agree that the changing from first person to third person was noticable in a few places that broke the flow of reading. I also had to stop and check where you were from in your bio, because of the story setting and then using a lot of american colloquialisms didn't sound quite right.

Grammatical errors aside, this was a fantastic story. You didn't have a lot in the way of sex but you had a lot of character development and story which I enjoyed. Phenomenal!

I really liked the story and can live with the erro's as long as I can make some here. I am not a writer so fire me.!

I just hope you don't break these two up and make all of us very disapointed as to the ending.*

Make it a point to ponder but "PLEASE" do not split these two up.! Will be looking for Ch.2 (and yes I will pray.!!*)

Thanks. JAG

PS: yes you got a "5".*

Absolutely awesome

hope in the coming chapter[s] that he realizes that he is truly in love with her and marries her and has a family and they live happily ever after.

"John was a priest who retired to raise his daughter."

What happened to his vow of celibacy?

Now we all know that those vows get broken, but the family is still quite pious.

Just all a little strange.

is kind of a selfish prick.