All Comments on 'Second Chance, Book 04'

Goodwriting; but I don't know about story telling> Like what happened to Ron's lady? Bejey? Chap !'s discovery is never revealed. resolved.the sexy wife is known for blowjobs, what else? Certainly she performed for the owners.Who else? The discovery of all that is your story. It didn't materialize.

Didn't see that comeing, story is great for me so I will wait and see how it goes, Thanks!

I'm not Shakespear for sure, but does anybody have any idea why an author would set up all those issues with a character in the beginning of a short story, just to kill the character off?? What's the point??? Author, do you need a brain scan??

Coaster, you put us all on the wrong foot with your title. Off course, Brent deserves a 2nd chance. But don't tell us Bonnie has been a stripper too in an earlier life. That would be a bit much and, besides, you leave some of the usual loose ends for what they are, so far. What about the exploits of Jeanette ? Even with his well balanced character, surely Brent should/would have needed to know what exactly happened, if only for some closure. You know, the usual why?, how long?, how far did Jeanette take her performance in the Wheel ? What with her sister ? What with Ron? OK, the positive approach can be to not look back, only forward. But deep down, especially for the well organized and pro-active mind that he seems to have in his job, he must have thought many times about all of that. He doesn't seem to leave loose end around. Even if their world came to a temporarily standstill, life pushes to move on to tackle the daily problems, but the mind can wander back and still wonder. Are we getting some answers ? G.Belgium

<p>This is a well written story and I've enjoyed it thoroughly so far. I have no problem with the alleged "loose ends" that have been left hanging. They weren't really important to the story development, and changing locations in mid-stream just cut off the need to follow up on them.</p>

<p>As for the rants of the peanut gallery about Jeanette's mis-deeds. We only have the word of the husband's biggest enemy that Jeanette was giving blow-jobs. Why should we believe him? When she came home from work, she showered and washed her clothes. But she didn't gargle. Good enough for me.</p>

<p>I enjoy it when a writer knows his subject. Apparently coaster2 is conversant enough with the Mill Work industry to let us in on the inner workings of the business. Or he knows enough buzzwords to completely fool a know-nothing like me. I like it.</p>

The story is well written, but I agree with the Anonymous who say you build an interesting person with a personality problem, thereafter killing her. This story went from an interesting conflict to a tear dripping love story, unless the writer does not make Bonnie as an ex stripper too. That's an interesting suggestion!

of the direction the story took, it is still a good tale. I would have preferred it following the cheating wife path but think you are one of the finest authors to have come along recently in your categories and wherever you take the story is fine with me.

The title of the story suggests that the focus may be on the Second Chance. The author made a nice fake giving us the idea that it would Jeanette's Second Chance but it is really Brent's! <P>

It isn't easy to face life alone and this is what could be around the corner for someone in his situation. The author could be throwing some false starts in, though this Bonnie sounds delicious. But wait a minute, what does he really know about her? Just what she revealed so far. Sure he knows more about her physical side than would be normal for the third day but I was a bit bothered by the barebacking with an unknown lady. That is not very intelligent behaviour! Obviously there is now the question of why someone who his supposedly a longtime without a man would be on the pill or did she lose the power of reproduction after the birth of her son?

I admit that a story that clarified Jeanette and Joanna would be interesting...

this episode to the others.I was particularly pleased that he was "involved" with Bonnie Simpson,if it had been Bonnie Taylor he would really be heading for trouble!

TEXTBOOK case of good writer VS a Good story. Coaster 2 is a BAD storyteller because he does this all the tme. This author raises all these question drops all these clues in BOOK1 and leaves them hanging.

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Is it really Unreasonable to wonder why the BJ conotation?

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what about Dixon?

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the wife's sister?

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did Brent EVER talk to the wife's sister?

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was there any sex involved between the "customers" the stripper wife?

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Now that Brent has moved on... where are all those Unanswered questions the AUTHOR raised in Book1?

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Great writing. Plot is Good... but as a STORY this one sucks moose balls

Didn't see that coming. Lot's of unresovled questions, I hope we get some answers. Well written as always.

Author - you smooth writer. All the prior issues have gone away - no longer relevant to his life or the story.<P>

Some won't get that or don't want to - but my congrats Author. We are now into the meaning of the title which could be a good thing.<P>

You are appreciated and a very good escape artist.<P>

With Very High Regard<P>

PS: The story is over now right Author?

Author spends almost 18 chapters writing about his first wife's demise. Unless there is a reason for issues such as her being called BeeJay that can be tied into the remainder of the story, those 18 chapters could have been handled in a few sentences, or author may have just as well give us 18 chapters of phone book.

I would love to read more dont stop now its getting good with bonny in the picture and Brent geeting his mind back together with someone new in his life.

Pat

Atlanta,ga

This chapter is more like a real life story. Why am I confused. What was the point of the story up until now?

character with cancer, uh, sure! takes a genius to do that! <p>

after the soiled activities of the "30 to 50 something" wife mother humping poles --- and sucking and fucking in exclusive areas for big bucks to "put away for the children college and our retirement accounts" --- he killed her by having her declared total and unconditional life, and sincere contrition,,, and, then, bammmm, she has come down with an incurable, NATURAL cancer,,, not something she picked off of some promiscuous customers she's been fucking in some fancy quarters or motel... <p>

oh, no, Jeannette's too virtuous to fuck people like that, even if she danced naked on stage! sure! LOL

glad the bitch died. all strippers are cock sucking whores but you sort of forgot to mention that, and the lap dances, as well as the private room "dances".

Although it was hinted at, it might have been good to have the therapist make a more definitive comment on how brain tumors often cause behavioral changes.

Minor quibble: What is the deal with "Yah"? Do you mean "Yeah"?

LOL, I'm re-reading, and just noticed that this time I made a comment in the last chapter that I made here last time!