All Comments on 'Secret Lessons Ch. 01'

This is not written in the "first person", in which the narrator would be saying "I...", but in the second person, in which the narrator says "You...".

This isn't a 1st person narrative. It's 2nd person.

That said, 2nd person is an absolutely stupid way to write a story.

I'm enjoying the story, please continue writing.

instead of teaching her what she did wrong the selfish bastard beat off and came on her face, didn't even get her naked, two stars but should have been one or none

Author needs to learn how to really write a good story. He/She also needs to learn which 'person' is which. This story is told in SECOND person, not first person - and it's a really poor way to try and tell a story!

Anonymous below suggested that cheating on your wife with your daughter is not appropriate; I would ask, as above, then why did you read it, if you don't fantasize and like incest oriented stories, then go read the many other categories available.

Yes, the writer has some deficiencies in style and editing, but a large number of the 25,000 plus views to date like the topic category and will keep reading the rest of this story line.

Please don't use "that" when referring to people, People are who or whom.

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You don’t know what ‘first person’ actually means do you?