by regularguy13
But the ending, in my opinion, well it sucked. You went through all of that, then just bam cut it off. I still give you 4 *.
I agree the ending was abrupt. This story has so many was it could continue and become one of the best, if not the best stories on here. You are an excellent writer. You seriously need to consider adding more chapters.
I was hoping for them both to get pregnant at the same time, but hopefully another chapter will be added later on.
"...but they were nicely shaped..."
Should have read: Her breasts weren't huge AND they were nicely shaped.
Many of the women,in the stories on this site, have Ds or even DDs, or bigger, "and don't sag a bit. Those writers either have never been with a large titted woman, and/or have never heard of gravity.
Smaller breasts are better shaped, more sensitive, and are sexier.
Good premise.
But the sex is simply too mechanical. No reluctance. Not enough details. Not enough dialog about what was being done by one to the other.
Frankly, couldn't get past page 3.
Three stars.
It's a nice story, but I've never known any woman able to radically change her personality so quickly. In my experience, it's always a ploy to regain the upper hand.
Well-written, started off just as you planned, and moved it along just right!! Cole is a 'gentleman', to a point....took advantage of Evie...
At least your character, E ie, was not bindi to be about being taken advantage of...appreciated his taking care of her when she was gonna have something REALLY BAD done to her by those 2 guys at the club.
And, yes, a person CAN change like that; reality makes us see things differently when it confronts us...How do I know, you ask?? Because, I had a moment like that.
While I did not completely change, I DID realize something had to give...& it did!
Hhhmmm...my 2nd time reading this...and I enjoyed it just as much as the first time!!
Maybe, a lesson could be learned by others reading this...see people CAN change at some point...circumstances dictate the need for this (and a chemical shift in the brain, from a small trauma!)
Love this so much...a real deal in the face of all those I read here...
Five**5**Stars๐ ๐ ๐ ๐ ๐
I award very few 1s - but this piece deserves it.
The characters are parodies The dialogue is equal to that which a committee of mediocre middle schoolers would produce. The story line is completely predictable