All Comments on 'Seduced in the Sauna'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
women / woman

"The sauna was already hot, and there was a man and a women in there."

A women? I think you meant a "womAn". Just as mAn = 1 person, so does womAn = 1 person.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Sad, the previous commenter

A nice well written story, and all anon can say is I found a typo. So: you need some excitement, some emotion, some conflict, and this didn't have much. Or you can rely on juicy sex to carry the scene, but not much of that. How was it, both slick with sweat? They don't shower afterwards? you could have done a lot with that,

Next time

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
Oregon Country Fair?

Sounds like it.

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