All Comments on 'Seducing Mr. Malone'

First time writing deserves a first time comment:

Nicely done!

Concise, good narrative flow, believable and engaging dialog and, perhaps most importantly - as a Mr. Malone archetype myself - the story hewed closely to a plausible and desirable taboo.

Rachel's empathy for Jackie and her desire not to destroy Jackie's marriage speak to a more complex and compelling character that would be a hell of a lot more fun to tip over and fuck on your wife's side of the bed than would a character that didn't appreciate the contradictory power in her classically submissive position.

Your appreciation for the subtleties of realistic power interactions and your craft, as a writer, both belie your years. I hope to see more from you in the future.

Meanwhile, thank you for this story.

Well written, fun, and very very hot. I do hope you find enough inspiration to keep writing. You have a gift and a wonderful naughty streak. Well done!