All Comments on 'Segmented'

Well that was something completely different!

Thank you :)

Wow! To borrow words from a favorite Elton John song: that was weird and wonderful.

I keeping finding myself placing your stories on my secret pleasures list. Thank you!

IK look forward to reading your next submission. So, so good

Thank you for scratching this fetish of mine so well. This was an amazing read

very imaginative and well written too.

Crazy. But good crazy.

"Now you're thinking with portals"

Wow, that is a trip into the Twilight Zone. So very good and something original in a wasteland of mediocre repetition.

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Cheers

That was wild! Now let them swap heads!

I couldn’t get past the first page. Firstly ‘ebb’ isn’t a glow, it describes something decreasing or fleeing like the tide. Secondly, we use double quotes when indicating someone is speaking.

And that is just the start of what was bad, on just the first page.

Really hot story. Thanks for posting! Really enjoyed this one

Absolutely incredible! Pls make a sequel

Great idea with the ring that separates in the middle. As well as the fact, that they can be "stacked" and keep individual body parts connected as a middle part is missing. That's a great idea. :)

There are a few similar stories under the category of "Natural Body Magic" or "NBM", just to give you a fitting tag, if you are interested in this topic. :)

I want to see it made into a movie. “and the winner of this years AVN Award for special effects” seriously though I really enjoyed the story.

This was great. Really hot and inventive. Any chance at a continuation?

i am a bit confused about the stacking of the rings like if you put the rings on your wrists ankles and neck wouldn't you all of a sudden have a phantom body and then be able to move around you wouldnt take my dick without leaving some colateral like maybe a boob

Yes, continue it!

Maybe strap his butt to a gloryhole while his junk is her toy.

Or let her be stuck somewhere, and he can pull her out piece by piece ;-)

Amazing story that deserves a sequel.