All Comments on 'Semper Fi Pt. 01'

I know, I know. I hate 'buts', too. BUT, even though this is a great story line it's choppy. Too many dropped conversations and quite a few errors with names, grammar and punctuation. I will say that I am looking forward to reading more. Somehow, even with the errors I mentioned, it kept my attention. Good start, just try and make sure that the next installment is a little more complete. ~Robin

Good story, hot. More!

Great story. Love the intrigue. One question though... why is this tagged as interracial? Correct me if I'm wrong but all the characters are white. There was no description of a black woman, unless I'm reading the wrong story?

The different names identify the different victims in the story... they are the cheating wives and their lovers. People don't always speak in complete sentences. The interracial aspects show up later in the story. Thanks for reading.

calibeachgirl

but when it occurs tragedy teems. TK U MLJ LV NV

YOU HAVE A HIT WITH THIS STORY......YOUR TALENT WILL OVERCOME THE OBSTACLES IN TALES OF YORE, GORE OR LUST. TK U MLJ LV NV

I cannot stand Caitlin, she is selfish, and what is with the writers on this site writing female characters who think a father has no right to know he's going to be one, or already is one? Frank deserves to know, The child deserves to know their father. She doesn't want to be hurt by Frank because of something that happened in her past? WTF does she think she's doing to him? Forgot it's all about Caitlin and how she feels, so she wouldn't even notice how Frank is feeling.

you wrote her to be.

Try to look up "Paul Watzlawick".

Great first chapter! can't wait for more!!

I'm loving it so far but I just had to say thanks its really interesting.

Loved this first chapter and can't wait to read the next. Top notch work from a top notch writer. Thanks for your excellent presentation.

Policial, mystery, sex, insecurity, human beings! Great. Nice set-up!

after reading chocolate kisses and seashells I expected more. Frank and Caitlyn have no chemistry.

Endless drama and not enough crime solving

Boring as fuck. The murders were more interesting than this romance which made NO sense what so ever. Frank shows up and BOOM they are in love and fucking. I have decided the scoring system on this site is about 50% accurate at best. It seems if you post enough you get rated well even if your stories are weak.

Boring as all get out,and lots of drama.This tale has much potential. I hope it is developed. LP

Silly cow wants to make her mind up, and apply it to the job.

Cheating skanks like Mary should die!!

Another badly written romance story!!

Your writing gets worse