All Comments on 'Sensualist Pt. 02 Ch. 04'

Toward the end of the first page you switch from third to first person and part of a previous page is repeated on page 2. Be careful with your editing, ask someone to proofread your stories.

I'll try to do better. The first installment of Sensualist was first person, and I began the second segment the same way, then around the 4th chapter I changed my mind and went back to chapter 1 and thought I had made the appropriate changes to 3rd person. Apparently I didn't and my proof reader missed some as well. Again, I'm sorry for the inconvenience, and hope you'll continue reading the story.

Paris