by TitManDDo
Woven very nicely. Look forward to seeing where you go with this. Thank-you.
NOT a romance, not even close. Not sure what you were thinking. I like some of your other stories but not this one. Unfollowed you after this one.
I really like your stories. They are long without being lengthy. The story patterns are sometimes hard to grasp at first, but by the second page, it's becomes apparent how you want this to be read. Story wise, it's really good. A bit of heartache, a splash of drama (none so far in this installment except for the death part) a good helping of romance and detailed sex (the part a reader can really envision and mastrubate to) i would like a bit more foreplay on the sex part. Everything is confided to the bedroom. A quick grope, a teasing showing of a nipple or a lack of underwear in the restaurant or a simple text as an intermesso between the sex scenes would turn the heat up on the story. So far everything outside the bedroom is romance and sex is barely in play,
Great story and so well paced. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Cheers
SAGE
Excellent story! How you put it together is amazing, thank you. Excellent. 5 BIG FAT FUCKING BLAZING NOVA STARS. Damn that was good. Going to follow now in hope there will be a second chapter and also read the rest of your stories!
interesting to read, lots of character development and lots of follow-on options
What a wonderful story, that I will read again. Excellent work. Thank you so very much.