by nikkilamkins1738
The use of the wrong term for an orgasm/sexual things indicates an author that needs serious instruction in writing this kind of story. Get a real dose of life as its "cum/cumming/came" for semen/orgasm/etc. NOT REPEAT NOT 'come' join the world or don't post stories.
Nice story but rushed.
A little foreplay makes the story better
@anonymous - the word actually IS "come". The bastardisation of English by Americans - use of 'words' such as "cum", "nite", etc. - does not change the English language. What it DOES do, however, is highlight the failings of your 'education'.
Funnily enough, people like you are quick to try and point out supposed shortcomings, but where are you when other writers use "peaking" instead of "peeking"?
Seems your 'education' extends only as far as recognition of homophones. Actual knowledge of valid synonyms is conspicuous by it's absence.