All Comments on 'Sexy Waitress Ch. 01'

Nice story, but White Zinfandel sucks. Say Merlot or Chardonnay. and 28C? That's not a legit bra size...

Great start to both a writing career, and a good storyline! I can't to read the sequel that certainly cries out to be written!

You can't write (nor can I). You need to get an editor who can point out your errors - spelling, grammar, wrong word, mixed tenses and so on.

However, the premise of the story is a good one. Once you have part 2 written, make sure to involve someone else because you just do not see where you are going wrong.

28C is a bra size just not commonly found or made. Easier to buy 30B.

But suggest next story check bra sizes are normal, so a little research is needed.

No wonder mum was worried about her daughter becoming a slut, she is one. From zero to one screw, to DP in one night. If she takes after her mum, would love to meet mum in a restaurant. Will start serving job now and wait.