by VelvetTipper
I'm extremely excited after reading your story. It was one of the best stories about a seduction of a innocent girl that I have ever read.
I've been looking for a story like this ever since I had read HEARTS ON FIRE and this one is very similar. I just love it when I can find a story like this.
I had to take matters into my own hands twice while I was reading it.
Thanks for helping me feel like I do. Lol Betsey
Very well written. However, you should probably consider altering your dialogue slightly as it sounds just a tad bit unatural and archaic, especially given the situation.
Extremely well written and equally erotic. VelvetTipper is certainly one of the better writers. She, I believe, has vast experiences loving women, or a vivid imagination.
I'd like to go on a vacation with her. WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Great seduction and buildup to the sexual part of the story, which was spectacular! Thank you for posting it.
This is another great extremly erotic story, by Velvet Tipper. Her vivid and sensuous descriptions, can't help but completely arouse you. Velvet, really knows how to excite us!
You must continue to tell us more of this delight please !!!
it was a good story, but the editing problems made it difficult at times to follow. barbara or johanna? kept switching back and forth too much. other than that, very nice.