All Comments on 'Shared Love'

Graat story

The names switched a few time

I liked the story but the ending feels a bit rushed!

I'm just going to say this cause it's not an insult it's just an honest opinion. Your writing style really ignores the "show, don't tell" principle. I can tell youre trying to do stories that have deeper characters and more emphasis on morality, but it fails because your characters speak to each other like robots, and instead of describing their personalities with a behaviour or event that shows us how they behave, you simply describe everything that's going through everyone's heads at all times. This makes your writing boring because all your male protaganists are perfect, ultra-rational, paragons of consideration and maturity, and all your women are in complete hero worship of the male protaganist because of how considerate and mature he is. There's no personality or relateablity that comes through just a moral high-ground, power fantasy. It's impossible to care about characters that speak like they're reciting psychology essays all the time, and show no nuance of personality. I'm encouraging you to try to rework your approach to story-telling

Really like FMF romances, especially without the FF.

Needs some tweaks as already stated before, but a good, easy to read story.

In the real world, enjoy the ride and start hiding money...just in case

1 star - I did not like this story. I won't read any more.

Schwanze1 nailed it.

Great fiction, scary real life.

@nixrox

Nobody cares.

Another 5 from a writer with keen insight into life.

On the other hand, it seems that the author has a penchant for rejecting the concept of a Creator and has little respect for "pseudo-religious moralists".

If he used his normally super keep insight into human psychology, he would have noted that they are in fact some very keen Bible based moralists who don't think that a government should describe individual's morals. At the same time they believe the Creator, in love, placed in mankind a conscience with basic morals such a making murder unacceptable or the taking of what belongs to another (stealing) a punishable moral offense. The Bible shows the basic union of one man to one woman the basis of marriage, but also presents great and moral leaders who married more than one woman. It also shows the dangers of such marriages.

For atheists these guys are sure living a biblical lifestyle. Just as Abraham's wife Sarah brought Hagar into their household as a second wife , Eileen brought Debbie into their home and arranged to for Sam to have two spouses. Well told. 5 stars!

Firstly great story despite the inconsistencies. I loved it, secondly the comments section as usual has the agenda-ists going, not as we might think about a thug attacking a woman and hospitalising her or about people finding love and happiness together, but about a single phrase re atheism. If only we could delete all the religion in the world and all the purveyors of it we’d all live in a happier place. Oh and all the thrice damned politicians as well….

Regards Ppfzz