All Comments on 'Shari Holds a Torch'

Well written and quite realistic ;-)

I really enjoyed this one. The way you built it up to the love-making scene... and then so beautifully described the scene (along with the aftermath)... made the story a truly pleasurable read. Thank you for sharing it with us.

While I enjoyed your story I felt that your use of the words Dyke and Butch in this story were unnecessary. It was a turn on story but also a degrading one to women who live the lifestyle.

Very erotic - just loved it. I´m looking forward to read the next chapter. =)

I really loved the way Velma was in charge and all the details.

You did a nice job on the rewrite. Very realistic. Look forward to more Shari and Velma stories.

Enjoyed most of it but referring to Velma as an old dyke was a bit strong. I thought it didn't fit in with the tone of the piece which to me was quite gentle and loving. But that's my thoughts. Well done.

Not sure if the combo of past and present tenses was handled smoothly. The present tenses jarred.

I like the writing, the thing of the teacher student doesn’t bother me because she is over 18, it’s exciting. But calling old dyke...I don’t think it’s nice. Not nice words together. What is old? There is the difference in age but you don’t call old to someone of 47 or 57. You can call old to someone of 76 or 80 but it’s not nice. You can say older...please

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Should’ve added some anal

So sad you took a basically good story-line and repeatedly used "butch" "dyke" "old" and "bitch" references that made the story seem demeaning and insensitive. All dominant or top girls/women are not necessarily as you portray them. In my opinion, your mindset makes me think you are either an insensitive-man writing these stories or a crude and unhappy woman. Again, just my opinion. The same story/stories could be written with more tenderness and less stereotypical phrasing, which would enhance the erotic content and quality. :-( Sorry! Sara in San Diego

You're one of the tribe of lesbian authors who are driven to give your lesbians small or super-small breasts. Just another one of the herd who like to belittle and degrade lesbians - - as if normal-sized breasts would change your story much at all. But that's what you like to do - - anything to make a lesbian seem less desirable, less attractive, etc. Actually, I'm just sticking up for my lesbian sister and her lesbian friends who run across people like you day in and day out. You are a dysfunctional individual! Do you want proof? Talk to a professional counselor sometime and learn about yourself. But you and I both know that you won't do that. You will simply continue to hate.