by Syzoth
As far as nonconscent stories go, that was a tough read. Amanda was fucked and abused so badly that I actually felt sorry for her.
So why did I love this story so much? I was hard the whole freakin time reading it and jerked off afterwards.
Yea, I'm a perv.
I really liked Chapters 1-6. I think the author Syzoth has a unique and powerful way with words. And I admire how the previous stories seem to be a loving ode to his wife.
But Chapter 7 is disgusting sleaze.
I get it, it's a nonconsent story posted on a sex website, and it even has a disclaimer at the beginning. But I felt sick reading about the graphic rapes. An obvious rape fantasy about your wife just crosses the line for me.
I do, however, have to admit that I was pleasantly surprised by the attention given to workplace sexism in Chapter 7. As a woman who frequently experiences it, I was actually happy to see it as the central theme to this story. At the very least, the author appeared to be calling it out for what it is: something horrible.
But please go back to sharing your wife, Syzoth. Not raping her.
I don't think the writer was trying to recreate the Iliad & the Odyssy (although I thought this story was pretty epic), so you shouldn't critique it as such.
I get sick of reading comments from people who take themselves too seriously.
Just accept Chapter 7 for what it is, a nonconsent/reluctance story with a really hot gang-rape fantasy.
If it gets your panties in a bunch, then don't fuckin' read it!
I make it a point not to comment on other people's comments, but I wanted to say a few things since I was a Volunteer Editor for this story and helped guide the author.
1. I'm glad BallerinaBelle brought up workplace inequality because that's something I definitely wanted to highlight since I think I brings a lot of realism to the story.
2. I never review stories involving rape. The only reason why I took this one on is because I actually look at Chapter 7 as somewhat of a female empowerment story, as odd as that may sound. Amanda DOES kick ass at the end. In my opinion, anyway.
Previous chapters were about sexual fulfillment, this was about violence. It was not needed or wanted. No empowerment just violent abuse.
the author has the balls to write about stuff most men won't admit they get off to.
Chapter 7 was extremely rough to read but in the end Mandy got revenge. It wasn’t just sexual harassment it was Rape. That kind of action warrants a police report but she was able to get revenge and save some respect for her fellow girl workers and herself. In this day with all the sexual harassment cases it was a strong ending for any woman.
The author reared some ugly scenes but all in all wrote a great series.
Thanks for sharing Syzoth.
Cheers. Gary. I don’t remain anonymous I just can’t find my actual profile here
When is it ok to write about rape? I think that when your wife has proof read the story, and she is ok with it, specifically if she is the center of story should matter.
Having said that I am generally not ok with stories, even fictional, where the rapist gets off easy like the 2 bastards did in the story.
V.
You tagged this story appropriately and you put in a warning. Offended people knew what they were getting into.
Anyway, I found this very arousing. The bro banter and the double vag had me throbbing. Boys will be boys! Thanks for sharing such a hot story. Looking forward to your next one.
... is it a story about "girl power"?
I'll go with the rape fantasy!
Not sure why people are upset about the rape scenes when this is a NONCONSENT story. Distasteful? Yes. Hot? YES !!!
Normally, I don't like nonconsent or bondage, but wanted to read this to continue the series. The ending redeemed the gratuitous violence. .
big fan of the double vag and noncon just made it hotter.
you clearly labeled this for what it was, so not sure why people are getting upset
I liked you're "Amanda" series up to this point, but this was just ridiculously over the top. I get that it's NC, and I don't have a problem with NC stories, but this was just gratuitously brutal (and a little disturbing that you fantasize about your wife in that way).
From a story-telling stand point, it was completely unbelivable. She wouldn't have been walking out of that motel room, she would have ended up in the ER (seriously, women have died from less). And if she did, somehow manage to avoid life-threating injury in spite of the savage beating and repeated rape that she endured, how would she have explained to her husband, when she finally got home, that she looked like she had been beaten and raped? And why let them off so easily? She should have reported them to the police. In fact, she should have called the police from the motel room so they could collect evidence. I know she was worried about the people in the office, but there was ZERO evidence of her sleeping with her boss, so Geoffrey had nothing to hold over her. Besides, no one would care what they had to say once they had been arrested and changed with multiple counts of First Degree Sexual Assault, Kidnapping, Battery, and attempted Murder (because that's EXACTLY the laundry list of charges that a DA would have thrown at them).
Sorry, Syzoth, but this story was not good.
Just wanted to leave another comment here. This was one Amanda story I really enjoyed, hope you write one similar to this again.