All Comments on 'Shawn and Kendall Ch. 03'

The inevitable is only a chapter away. 5⭐️

Finish it next so we don’t have to search for chapter upon chapter.

Not anxious at all…

M

There is nothing wrong with a good slow burn, a good tease, but if the burn is too long, the fuse may sputter and go out with your readers.

Love the slow burn

Yeah, what Klitomatic said. You have drawn this out just about as far as is sustainable. There will come a time in the not-too-distant future when your readers will lose interest and just walk away. A little bit is a slow burn. Too much is a tease. And no one likes a tease. Teasing leads to aggravation. Aggravation leads to anger. The chapters that are way too short only exacerbate the problem and magnify it.

Things are heating up. Very nice.

Nice how this continues to play out.

Writing an intimate story in the third person like this, is much harder than in the first person, but can have significant rewards. Chapter one was a little stilted, not surprisingly, but it's now sounding much more natural. Great writing and very realistic plot and understanding.