All Comments on 'Shawn and Tyler Ch. 02'

Dawn really is too much. There's nosey and then there's nosey.

Absolutely hot as hell. These two are great together. I hope that Shawn also bottoms for Tyler - love when a big muscular stud bottoms for a smaller guy. Also Dawn really needs to back off and respect some boundaries. Walking into the bedroom in the morning is way too much.

Overall this is very good - but you're flipping points of view from sentence to sentence and that can make for a difficult read. It also forces you to use their names constantly. Try breaking it up into mini POV chapters.

Love the story…but Dawn is too much. I know someone as nosey as Dawn…my mother-in-law. I’ve seen her, with her ear pressed to her brother’s bedroom door, trying to listen to his conversation with his girlfriend. That’s something I could also see Dawn doing. Maybe if she paid more attention to her man…he wouldn’t be using his right hand to pleasure himself while thinking of the rack on his new secretary…just saying.